Madame Claville's Soliloquy

Hello love,

How tragic you hath been

Thy sweetness spawned by tongue

Twas such a candy cut

I bathe thine blood

Foul, foul, verminous blood

Dost thine eyes succumb

Thy frail thread of hope

heeding a direly love

Let me hold thee

kiss thee

Your heart pressed against thine breasts

Lub, dub, lub dub…

it goes

a hastening tempo

Lub, dub, lub dub…

whilst venom seething betwixt thy dry, covetous lips

A broken melody fills thine ears

Stunned at the deafening silence

Oh, why hath the beating stopped?

Author's Note

I’m currently experimenting with character sketches and so I came up with this piece. It’s character- oriented, and if there might be a little oddness in the choice and usage of archaic words, It goes to the character I’m trying to portray.

Reviews

[Kenaz]

Yes, I feel the language as a sign of the character's age eternal. My heart beat along with your writing. Fantastic

[GunMetal]

I can practically hear your character's voice speaking melodiously. It is quite an unfortunate curse, to kill the heartbeat for eternity and love. Great use of archaic words. It is a skill that is rarely attempted, and difficult to pull of, but you do so elegantly.

[Revery]

Vampire love seems a little complicated and deadly. lol The themes in this type of write though are potent, as desires to consume and destroy, for vampires result in eternity through death.

[eglantine]

Again, nice! I really enjoy your playing with older english language as well. Sometimes I catch myself using "thine" and "dost" etc. in everyday conversation lol

[Coyote Poetry]

I believe must stay away from woman with Vampire teeth. I like the artwork and the story in the poem. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote