why don't you see like me?

why don't you see like me?

A Poem by linear

Perhaps i should bleed my words upon the wallThen you might see, and even call

Maybe its you, though it may be me
Cant we wake up from this misery

You cast dark clouds at my feet
Are you hoping i'll retreat

Why dont you see
Yes see like me, then maybe we will both be free

Free to love like others do
Free to love each other too

© 2014 linear


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An aching call for understanding and for love.

I hope it's helpful; I made some suggested copy edits for you below:

Perhaps I should bleed my words upon the wall…
Then, you might see, and even call.

Maybe it's you… though it may be me…
Can't we wake up from this misery?

You cast dark clouds at my feet.
Are you hoping I'll retreat?

Why dont you see… Yes, see like me?
Then maybe we will both be free…

Free to love like others do…
Free to love each other too.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

linear

6 Years Ago

Punctuation I leave for those who would edit, seeing as my writing is.....well....kind of hmmm...sha.. read more
linear

6 Years Ago

Punctuation I leave for those who would edit, seeing as my writing is.....well....kind of hmmm...sha.. read more
MomzillaNC

6 Years Ago

I wouldn't say it's trashy. Perhaps a little unpolished. But, that's only because it's the first rus.. read more



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The birds fly up beyond the cascades of indigo sky holding an "eternal' breath to freedom so does love. There`s always a truth; a mystery of love I find in your stuffs. Nice imagery.

Posted 6 Years Ago


I see you and you see me....but alas....we are not who we claim to be....

Posted 6 Years Ago


linear

6 Years Ago

Are we not?
lost girl

6 Years Ago

I wonder in this realm of poetry if we indeed are....could be .....I see so differently than others .. read more
linear

6 Years Ago

:) that's the way to be....it's all good
beautiful write, more the kind I remember from you, I especially feel those last two lines.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

linear

6 Years Ago

So many thanks I give to you...
Corset

6 Years Ago

so many "welcomes" returned. :P
An aching call for understanding and for love.

I hope it's helpful; I made some suggested copy edits for you below:

Perhaps I should bleed my words upon the wall…
Then, you might see, and even call.

Maybe it's you… though it may be me…
Can't we wake up from this misery?

You cast dark clouds at my feet.
Are you hoping I'll retreat?

Why dont you see… Yes, see like me?
Then maybe we will both be free…

Free to love like others do…
Free to love each other too.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

linear

6 Years Ago

Punctuation I leave for those who would edit, seeing as my writing is.....well....kind of hmmm...sha.. read more
linear

6 Years Ago

Punctuation I leave for those who would edit, seeing as my writing is.....well....kind of hmmm...sha.. read more
MomzillaNC

6 Years Ago

I wouldn't say it's trashy. Perhaps a little unpolished. But, that's only because it's the first rus.. read more

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