Love late

 

Emotions wail inside my heart
Pelting me with visions of her
Screaming for a different life
Aching at the choices made.

Her face illuminates my mind
Grasping every breath I take
Reminding me where I belong
Not this life I lead today.

Running toward her recklessly
Fleeing from what once was
Destroying that which was built
Knowing nothing but her love.

Memories of us tangled in youth
Years erased the passion that played
Lives evolve forgetting love
Finding comfort in today.

Days slide by searching for her
Night exhausted needing sleep
Pressing past a normal man
Heartache in the drivers seat.

Approaching her with heavy heart
No words allowed too paint the way
Love escaped us once again
Resting flowers on her grave.

Reviews

[Bullet Soul]

So completely creative :) You really put your own thoughts and your heart into this, and it shows. These are more than any random thoughts, their true emotions, and emotion is what made your poem great. Your lines are unique, different, and purely you. It's often hard to come up with thoughts that seem to flow together so well, but you definitely did a great job doing exactly that. I enjoyed reading this very much! Keep up the great writing. A poem definitely worth reading.

[J.P. Bristow]

Heavy and full of ache and longing.

[Lilly]

Simply beautiful. I love the flow and feel of this poem as well as the imagery

[Forever Mine]

creative, beautiful, artisic writing.

- forever mine

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what an eloquent write..the ending was poignant..well written with creative phrasing

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Poignant..

[LiLySoSo]

Beautiful, reminds me of Joy Division's "Love will Tear Us Apart."

[CROSS QUARTRMANI]

I love this poem. The way it ended really surprised me.

[Revolved]

This is so excellent! Very excellent! I love how some of the words were not meant to rhyme, however they do! Very creative and just pure wonderful!

[Molafvt]

Very nice read except for the capitalization's at the beginning of each sentence. You don't need a lot of them and they just slowed me down from reading this wonderful tale about lost love. This stanza says it all, "Running toward her recklessly
Fleeing from what once was
Destroying that which was built
Knowing nothing but her love."
Your choice of words are eloquent and well chosen. It's got a pleasing meter and wreaks with passion. Very nice.

[Bard Constantine]

Outstanding work. Your choice of words and phrases are striking, delivering the emotional content without overwhelming. Flows quite nicely...