The Break Up

The Break Up

A Poem by Marshall Hanson

This is a free write poem I wrote after my recent break up.

With a single sentence you killed my dreams
Took apart my heart at the seams 
Cut me in half like a lazer beam
Destroyed my soul
Put me out like a cigerette 
and spit on my grave
all of this at the same time
my only guilt was loving you
for that i paid dearly
you say you dont feel the same
my broken heart is my own blame
the foibles of my own imagination
a disaster oof my own making
I guess I was the mistro 
In the orchestra of I love you's
I played the violin 
And sang the song of our demise
When all in all it was nothing more then your rhymes
Your lies and your lines
I am so dispicable for being their
Through thick and thin
For holding you up for oh so many months
I am to be hated for this
When in all reality your only mad 
Cause what you've done to me
Has made you feel bad

© 2010 Marshall Hanson

Author's Note

Marshall Hanson
This is a free write poem. So grammar and meter are not very good.

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It's great! Thank you very much!!

Posted 3 Years Ago

This is just amazing. It really expresses your emotions through the brake up & also comparing them to "objects". I love it.

Posted 12 Years Ago

I love it!!!1

Posted 12 Years Ago

two thumbs way, way up for this! the analogy you used when you said you were the mistro, orchestrating the "i love you's" as you played the violin of your demise... wow. totally captivated me. you have a way with words, you know. i enjoyed this poem a lot!

Posted 12 Years Ago

very passonate. very good poem

Posted 12 Years Ago

this poem is amazing! it touches my heart. it makes me want to cry!

Posted 12 Years Ago

this is exactly how i felt... the words rhyme perfectly.. love the idea of an orchestra... wow... just wow :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

it's odd, after my break-up I never really thought that anyone could ever feel what I felt then, and what I still, after all this time, feel now.
Guess I was wrong, because this write almost exactly says the thoughts that are in my own head.
I very much like the similes and the imagery. I've read loads of poetry about heart-break and such, and this is a refreshingly different style from what I usually see.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on July 13, 2010
Last Updated on July 18, 2010
Tags: Break Up, dating, relationships


Marshall Hanson
Marshall Hanson

Orlando, FL

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