The Third Door

The Third Door

A Poem by Undying Glory
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A duet song/poem on the social stigma and rejection faced by ex-convicts when they're released. They deserve a second chance, just like everyone else...

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The Third Door

Him: It's been years since I saw you smile
And the chasm spans for miles and miles
And though the steel door opens wide
I hesitate
Her: I've spent all these painful years
With grief, regret and many tears
And though you're coming home, for us, it could
Be too late

Both: Full of sorrow and heartbroken
Of a thousand words unspoken
So I hope and pray for a better day
Though the light is getting closer
Yet I'm still feeling so lonesome
As my silent world is turning ever gray
And though the darkness rages on I pray
For the sun to shine someday

Him: It's been years since I saw you laugh
As I walk this empty path
And everyone glares at me
Like I'm still bad
No job, no one offers me a post
Though I'm needing one the most
Let everyone stare at me
'Cause I've lost all I've had

Both: Full of sorrow and heartbroken
Of a thousand words unspoken
So I hope and pray for a better day
Though the light is getting closer
Yet I'm still feeling so lonesome
As my silent world is turning ever gray
And though the darkness rages on I pray
For the sun to shine someday

Her: My tears, so fluidly, they run
As I remember what you've done
But I know you're truly sorry now
Now you're here with me
So now we can start anew
For the perfect life, me and you
As the second door comes crashing down
Now we finally see

Him: With bloodshot eyes I pray
The third door will open someday
And the world takes us back 
With open arms
Her: Second chances in this life
Why are they so hard to find?
So I pray that you and me
Come to no harm

Both: Full of sorrow and heartbroken
Of a thousand words unspoken
So I hope and pray for a better day
Though the light is getting closer
Yet I'm still feeling so lonesome
As my silent world is turning ever gray
And though the darkness rages on I pray
For the sun to shine someday

© 2010 Undying Glory


Author's Note

Undying Glory
If you didn't get this one, the doors are literal and figurative obstacles in acceptance of the ex-convict in the community.
First door: the literal prison door
Second door: loved ones
Third door: the rest of the world
Inspired by a newspaper article I read, about a songwriting competition for ex-convicts...

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Very good

Posted 8 Years Ago


fantastic piece:)

Posted 8 Years Ago


Oh, so true. I love that you explain everything in case someone doesn't get it. Anyway, these songs are well written, and I can hear them in my head. Another great write you got here.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is amazing. I agree so wholeheartedly. Everyone deserves their second chance, but people are so unwilling to give them one. How can a person create a better life for himself if he's never given the opportunity? Driven by dire need, so many released convicts end up stealing or going back to drugs, why? Because they have no other way to make ends meet. Everyone refuses to give them the chance. Then they just shake their heads when the person ends up in jail again because that third door never opened and the only way to go was backwards. Very strong, and sadly very true poem. Excellent work.

Posted 8 Years Ago


very good. i like how you wrote this as a duet. it makes the song come alive and make it more 'real' and empahic. good write!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Really good! I love the two voices!

Posted 8 Years Ago


It's all been said, well worked

Posted 8 Years Ago


Very unique and cool concept. I like the idea, but I think what you specifically did with it and made out of it is why it is so good.

I definitely read it as a song/duet more so then a poem. Just the parts with one character, then another, then both, seemed very operatic or like a song from a musical.

I found the line, "And the world takes 'us' back," interesting. Since the line specifies "us" and not just "me." And the theme of second chances is a really powerful and strong theme to go with.

Personally, I think there's quite an interesting larger story here surrounding the song/poem. If you write fiction, I'd definitely look into what you have here and consider a larger story. The ideas, themes, and feelings here can just be so big and expanded on so much.

Posted 8 Years Ago


This is beautiful. What insight you have to such feelings and circumstances. I could really hear this as a song too! Very lovely snow!

Posted 8 Years Ago


Nicely done... the him/her format seems to work well here (so often it fails). There is a lot of repetition in the stanzas - I guess that works well enough for songs. I do think, though, that the word 'now' is a bit overdone in the fifth stanza. Good work.

Posted 8 Years Ago



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