The Third Door

The Third Door

A Poem by Undying Glory
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A duet song/poem on the social stigma and rejection faced by ex-convicts when they're released. They deserve a second chance, just like everyone else...

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The Third Door

Him: It's been years since I saw you smile
And the chasm spans for miles and miles
And though the steel door opens wide
I hesitate
Her: I've spent all these painful years
With grief, regret and many tears
And though you're coming home, for us, it could
Be too late

Both: Full of sorrow and heartbroken
Of a thousand words unspoken
So I hope and pray for a better day
Though the light is getting closer
Yet I'm still feeling so lonesome
As my silent world is turning ever gray
And though the darkness rages on I pray
For the sun to shine someday

Him: It's been years since I saw you laugh
As I walk this empty path
And everyone glares at me
Like I'm still bad
No job, no one offers me a post
Though I'm needing one the most
Let everyone stare at me
'Cause I've lost all I've had

Both: Full of sorrow and heartbroken
Of a thousand words unspoken
So I hope and pray for a better day
Though the light is getting closer
Yet I'm still feeling so lonesome
As my silent world is turning ever gray
And though the darkness rages on I pray
For the sun to shine someday

Her: My tears, so fluidly, they run
As I remember what you've done
But I know you're truly sorry now
Now you're here with me
So now we can start anew
For the perfect life, me and you
As the second door comes crashing down
Now we finally see

Him: With bloodshot eyes I pray
The third door will open someday
And the world takes us back 
With open arms
Her: Second chances in this life
Why are they so hard to find?
So I pray that you and me
Come to no harm

Both: Full of sorrow and heartbroken
Of a thousand words unspoken
So I hope and pray for a better day
Though the light is getting closer
Yet I'm still feeling so lonesome
As my silent world is turning ever gray
And though the darkness rages on I pray
For the sun to shine someday

© 2010 Undying Glory


Author's Note

Undying Glory
If you didn't get this one, the doors are literal and figurative obstacles in acceptance of the ex-convict in the community.
First door: the literal prison door
Second door: loved ones
Third door: the rest of the world
Inspired by a newspaper article I read, about a songwriting competition for ex-convicts...

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Wow. It did take me a few times of reading to fully understand the meaning, but this is made of awesome! It is almost like inter dimensional travel. Going from one extreme to the next. It flows well. A couple of times I had to re-read a few stanzas because of the rhymes and then no rhymes, but I think the "shock" factor of that really helps put this into perspective. Great work!

Posted 13 Years Ago


wow this is truly amazing work! It's breath taking and just amazing. Beautiful work here. This HAS to be one of my most fav poems ever! Your word it so well and it flows great! wonderful work! thanks for sharing!
~Wisher~

Posted 13 Years Ago


Amazing! Really, I love the way you have present this poem!
It's really sad plus heartfelt, but I think the ending sort of lit up a shine of hopeful.
This is one of my fav poem you have written so far!
Nice written!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Excellent read and write! Sad and very emotional!

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is beautiful. Could very easily be a song as well as poem! I look forward to reading more of your stuff, it seems very interesting!

Posted 13 Years Ago


fantastic….
pathos behind the lines…
touched me….
There is a musical touch in the structure….
Which is not easy to create….
For an average poet…..
Brilliant work…..


Posted 13 Years Ago


oh wow this is really beautiful. i found so many themes in here, a bunch of wonderful and painful ideas, if u look at this poem there's a lot to think about here. you did u truly wonderful job with this

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is indeed creative. Inspiration finds us in so many ways, but what you've been inspired by here, is a unique story to say the least.

The rhyme is quite nice and it compliments the structure of the poem rendering your the story with feeling, making the characters come alive. Like Abdul said the chorus is amazing.

Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Wow:)
This is one of the best pieces you have done lol
Simply awesome love, the structure is fabulous and adds to the message :)
The characters within this poem are wonderfully moving, works as a poem or story actually! A clever piece of work love:)
Awesome
xx

Posted 13 Years Ago


Very creative! You've outdone yourself with this brilliant poem. I loved every aspect of it. The structure was great, shaped like a conversation. The rhyming was brilliant. The flow was effortless. And the repetitive "chorus" was superb. The subject matter is, in itself, pretty serious. And I think you've achieved your objective of making people empathize with your characters.
This is very well penned indeed. Brilliant work!
100/100

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Undying Glory
Undying Glory

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