Midnight

Something I wrote about my friend, whom i haven't seen in ages...

Midnight

Four years have passed me by

Since I last saw your face

Through long-lost memories, in my broken mind

You were always my saving grace

As I close my eyes, your smile haunts my dreams

From happy memories so far gone

But now it seems you're so hard to find

Though I pray so much that I'm wrong

So how could I have been so blind

Not to treasure the one I had?

Now I'm standing here, wishing I could turn back time

So I would never feel this sad

Wherever you are, wherever you'll be

I'll keep searching till I find you

Across the deep blue skies and the distant seas

You know everything we had

It was all so true

And now you're gone

And I'm waiting here alone

Wishing I could change it all again

(But deep down I know

There's no more tomorrow)

I've missed you too long

Staring down at my phone

Your picture's all I have for the pain

(But deep down I know

There's just too much sorrow)

Waiting for the day when I'll see your face again

Across fields of green and golden sand

Four years have passed me by

And it's been pure bitterness every day

Watching the rain fall across the darkened sky

Wishing you weren't so far away

I really should have thought twice, but now it's all too late

Oh how I wonder where you are

Maybe I should just accept it, just accept my fate

Yet it'll never heal my scars

So how could I have been so blind

Not to cherish the days we shared?

Now I'm broken here, don't wanna leave the days behind

Though I didn't show it, I really cared

Wherever you are, wherever you'll be

I hope I find you in the end

But this I swear, I swear you'll see

You were such a wonderful friend

Such a wonderful friend

And now you're gone

And I'm waiting here alone

Wishing I could change it all again

(But deep down I know

There's no more tomorrow)

I've missed you too long

Staring down at my phone

Your picture's all I have for the pain

(But deep down I know

There's just too much sorrow)

Waiting for the day when I'll see your face again

Across fields of green and golden sand

Now the clock is stuck on midnight

And I'm here all alone

Though the moon is shining so bright

I'm a million miles from home

I call out through the darkness

Through the regret that shrouds me now

So if you're listening, don't give up on me

I know I'll find you somehow

And now you're gone

And I'm waiting here alone

Wishing I could change it all again

(But deep down I know

There's no more tomorrow)

I've missed you too long

Staring down at my phone

Your picture's all I have for the pain

(But deep down I know

There's just too much sorrow)

Waiting for the day when I'll see your face again

Across fields of green and golden sand

Reviews

[Linear]

Reads like the lyrics of a love song (is it) it's beautifully written with so much emotion shown, your readers cannot help but be touched by this.

[poetic soul]

Now the clock is stuck on midnight
And I'm here all alone
Though the moon is shining so bright
I'm a million miles from home
I call out through the darkness
Through the regret that shrouds me now
So if you're listening, don't give up on me
I know I'll find you somehow

these lines shook me!!! awesome work mate!!! i really enjoyed this piece!!! kudos!!!

[Aimee Mahathy]

Wow, this is wonderful! I wish I could hear it put to music! Longing for something or someone we lost is an emotion that is with us always, the proverbial "beak" in your chest (to remember The Raven) and one will always half-wish it to be out and half-wish it to remain.
Great job!

[Dinesh Sairam]

Such amazing lyrical quality in this piece- that includes the refrains. Palgrave (in The Golden Treasury) said that lyrical poems are bound to inherit refrains.. That even when the other lines are resonating in the reader's mind, the refrains always stand out from the lot.

And this is a quality I've always loved in Lord Byron's poems. To be honest, I find it here too- only if not for the meter. If you even get fond of prosody and stuff, I'm sure it'll be great to come back and re-do this wonderful piece in metric order.

Keep writing.

[A.Lee]

(sorry it took me so long to review) but this is simply amazing. You have such a way with words that makes them seem to just leap off the page and really touch your heart and makes you feel it. I loved the images and intense feeling of sorrow and determination that played through this. I can just imagine the music playing in the background. Absolutely beautiful work. I know I've said this before, but I really hope you're able to do something with your work someday. Great job. 100%

[HorrorMaster]

Very beautiful. You most be a true friend.

[lindsay]

Ahhh the flow is incredible. I really enjoyed it a lot. I agree that this is a poem to be read aloud with punctuation and power. Wonderful write!

[Cristal Bridges]

Beautiful! I think that it could actually turn into song lyrics. So full of raw unhinged emotions and feelings. Wonderful job. :)

[G. Anderson]

Laced through with very potent emotions... One to be read aloud simply for the grace and elaborate little phrases...

Gage Anderson.

[Hello, Goodbye]

The flow is beautiful. The candor is admirable. I truly enjoyed reading this and it felt almost intrusive reading what feels to be intimate feelings. I loved the haunting despondency in it, tho I doubt that the depressive notions were kind while experienced.. but.. at least they produced something of lasting worth.