The Way Of Dishonor (And Redemption)

The Way Of Dishonor (And Redemption)

A Poem by Undying Glory

My very first attempt at haiku writing. This is about the sad life of the Ronin in feudal seventeenth-century Japan...

The Way Of Dishonor (And Redemption)

Shame clouds the dark skies
Dishonor stains where I tread
I am too far gone. 

Rain falls with such pain
Blossoms tarnished by my deeds
I am on my own. 

My blades held aloft
Towards fading light so far
I shall not be saved. 

Blossom petals fall
Dying light shining from streams
Crash upon the graves. 

Fields of the fallen
Far beyond the Sundered Realm
Hear the black wind's song. 

Many more like me
Embracing the call to arms
Beyond mountains high. 

Katana raised high
I shall answer the strong call
Upon my honor gone. 

On ancestors past
Upon my ryus so strong
Glory shall be mine. 

© 2011 Undying Glory

Author's Note

Undying Glory
Image taken from Wikipedia
The image is of Miyamoto Musashi, one of the most famous ronin that ever lived.
For those who don't know, when a samurai's master had died or was defamed, a samurai had to commit honorary hara-kiri ceremonial suicide. Those who did not became ronin, master-less samurai, and were viewed with great dishonor.
If you don't like explanations then you may want to omit this paragraph.
This haiku story is based loosely after the battle of Sekigahara in 1600, where many samurai on the losing side became ronin. This battle was also called the Battle for the Sundered Realm. Eventually over a hundred thousand ronin went to fight at the Siege of Osaka. I'm writing from a ronin who's eager to regain his honor at the siege...
Tell me if I should write one for the Shoguns!

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This was a very good writing and kind of like a condensed story. This is something many people don't really know about so its good that you give some historical background for the writing. Please keep on writing about the culture, and yes do one for the Shoguns- I think it would be interesting to read.

Posted 9 Years Ago

Loved the powerful ending, lovely description

Posted 12 Years Ago

I agree with PrincessZeldaWannabe, I thought it was very powerful. You did a great job!

Posted 12 Years Ago

Really powerful! Great work!

Posted 12 Years Ago

sounds cool a story through haiku, i thikn they are actually supposed to describe something in nature but whatever works its poetry neway

Posted 12 Years Ago

I like it very good :)

Posted 12 Years Ago

Dishonour and the longing for redemption. Wonderfully expressed and poignant ... though I don't usually like Hakus

Posted 12 Years Ago

This is beautiful. I could tell what you were describing before I read your description at the top, which is good. You painted the picture beautifully. And great work for your first time doing Haiku's. I couldn't even tell that you were new to it.

Posted 12 Years Ago

Yeahh u should I think I no wat shoguns r. But u should do it. U r amazing at this writing. I can't believ this was ur frst haiku

Posted 12 Years Ago

Good. I can't belive that it's your first haiku. It's very good. The explanation was good.

Posted 12 Years Ago

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Added on January 25, 2011
Last Updated on January 26, 2011
Tags: haiku, poem, dishonor, way, redemption, and, ronin, sad, life, seventeenth, century, Japan


Undying Glory
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