Within A Valentine's Dream.

Another from my Valentine's Collection, 2020.

5 ….. Within A Valentine’s Dream.     

Within a Valentine’s dream

I hold you close, in love’s embrace

The passion that flows deep within our hearts

Here in Valentine stars, our love is displayed

In the midst of love’s stars, desires are fulfilled

Now and forever, eternal; my Valentine

And the night does sing in quiet joy

Vast are the chasms of the wondrous soul

As you and I dance in Heaven’s domain

Love does sing on the breath of a sigh

Ever a serenade of love is sung

Now that I hold an angel close to me

The stars shall ever shine for my beloved

In my heart, your rose shall ever remain

Never shall our blessed moon fail to shine

Everlasting echoes shall sing in the stars

‘Tis Luna’s smile that lights up our love

Stay with me now, within Heaven’s embrace

Delivering ever the joy of a love-filled dream

Remember ever, the song of joy's Spring

Ever our song of passion shall sing

And the joy of love we shall ever bring

Making you ever my Valentine queen

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love acrostics. I wonder if I've read other poems of yours & not noticed it was an acrostic? The way you make the first letters bigger drew my attention to it, so maybe I haven't missed any others! The key to a tight acrostic is not having it feel as if words have been chosen to fit the form, rather than flowing in a natural way. Your poem definitely has a natural romantic flow that would make a reader forget he/she is reading an acrostic! (((HUGS)))

[shadrach hah]

Hi, thank you for dropping by and the review on this piece, it is much appreciated. I try to just let the words flow and see where they lead me. Great to see you Barleygirl. Have a wonderful evening. Hugs always....Mike.

[Patricia]

This is just lovely, I loved the line, “Love does sing on a breath of a sigh”, just brilliant! The finale was perfect.

[shadrach hah]

Thank you for dropping by and the review on this piece, Patricia. It is true, love does sing on the breath of a sigh. I always enjoy letting the heart sing gently. Hugs....Mike.

[lightsong]

your last verse is the highlight of your all poem! it alone with few more brushes can stand as a poem itself, honestly it's the one I like the best on this piece, I know You choose to repeat the word "Valentine" on purpose, but I was thinking maybe if You used it less there it will strengthen your poem more? I will read it again to see how I feel about it, and of course always a romantic sweetness to read :>

[lightsong]

as I read it again, it is lovely as it, I was just thinking of the last line on verse one to play with the last few words...

Within a Valentine’s dream
I hold you close, in love’s embrace
The passion that flows deep within our hearts
Here in Valentine stars, our love is displayed
In the midst of love’s stars, desires are fulfilled
Now and forever, eternal; my Valentine

[shadrach hah]

Hi Gounwah, thank you for dropping by and the review on this piece, it is much appreciated. I do have a habit in some of my writes on using certain words within it a little too much. I shall see what I can do with the piece. I do like your last line for the first verse. I do think I shall use it. Thank you for your assistance. Hugs always....Mike.

[shadrach hah]

Made some changes to the piece, especially your last line on the first verse. Have a wonderful evening. Hugs always....Mike. Thank you once again.

[lightsong]

normally I don't wish to interfere in other poets works because I understand it's something special to them and I am not a professional poetess and to add my first language is not English, so I shouldn't step father of my limits, but sometimes a certain thing came to me as I read something, like what happened in your first verse. Thank You so much for your humble self receiving my note with an open heart, and please always be honest and give me your notes on my pieces anytime I accept them :>

[shadrach hah]

The changes fit the piece so well. Hugs always....Mike.