you can tell when a man is broken

3/9/09

You can tell a man is broken,

Through his eyes,

You can see the passion,

Once burned like a wild fire,

Now extinguished,

 

You can tell a man is broken,

Through his stance,

 Once straight with confidence and will power,

Now hunched and lacking self discipline,

 

You can tell a man is broken,

Through his walk,

Once walked as if he were balanced,

Now his steps heavy as if he carry the weight and problems of the world,

 

You can tell a man is broken,

Through his actions,

Once he brought peace and prosperity,

Now all he leaves in his path is chaos and destruction,

 

You can tell a man is broken,

By how far he’s fallen,

Once a man of justice and truth,

Seeking to bringing light into the dark place of the world,

Now a man that has be stabbed in the back,

Sticks to the shadows of the darkness,

Cares of no one’s justice,

His mind seeing a twisted truth to reality,

 

You can tell a man is broken,

By whether he loves or hates,

You can tell can’t you…

    

Reviews

[.Bunnie.]

This is so sad...it's now making me take a good look at my loved ones and wondering if they're broken. This is a lovely poem, though...it flowed really well, and I didn't notice any errors. Great job! The emotions ring loud and true.

[Brianna Brie]

Definitely one to ponder. Deep thinking and thoughtful piece. Great job!

[jessfoundwonder]

True (:
I liked this one.
Thanks for the review by the way.

[Shelby Baker]

Awesome! Nice flow of word! Ty for the review hope to read more of ur writing but for now I gotta deal with a old charger that won't charge.