Lost?

 

 

 

Immersed deep inside

The former hides

How long has it been?

Does anyone know when?

The abyss has become so wide

 

Old emotion has been away

The former has gone astray

How long has it been?

How long since then?

Everything disappeared that day

 

Have I lost myself?

 

This mask displays mavolence

The former has lost all sense.

How long has it been?

Why haven't I felt this sin?

This burden has become too immense

 

The facade is getting old

The former is much too cold

How long has it been?

Can I find my essence within?

My soul may already be sold

 

Am I far too gone?

 

Hope has been born

The former will return

How long has it been?

Does anyone know when?

The illusion is torn

 

I will tear down these walls

The former softly calls

How long has it been?

How long since then?

No more living in a doll

 

I am no longer lost.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

Any critisism is welcome. Good or bad, it's only going to help me.

Reviews

[Scarlett Moon]

Very well done. Nice flow and smooth transition. You definitely have talent.

[Victoria Everly]

Oh thank you!

[Liz]

The repetition in this is much needed and definitely adds to the poem as a whole. Nicely done!

[Victoria Everly]

Thank you very much.

[Trigorin]

I like the transition present in this piece, from the start to the end, and I think your tone helps that a great deal. Some parts in here come across as just a little bit less focused than others, but even so, this is well done.

[Victoria Everly]

Thank you!