You never Even Knew

You never Even Knew

A Poem by *Evelen*

I feel so empty

I feel so heavy

I feel so broken

I know I can no longer fly

I kept on wishing

I kept on hoping

I kept on loving

Even though I would always cry

I actually believed me

I actually believed you

And now I wish that I would just die

Cause I can no longer feel your voice

And I no longer have a choice

The emptiness has taken my heart

Along with every single part

That has fallen for you

And you never even knew 

© 2010 *Evelen*


Author's Note

*Evelen*
Please tell me honestly what you think of this poem. I know it's not so good and I'm sorry if you don't like it. Please ignore any grammar problems and such. Thank You! =)

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I really like the structure and flow of this one. I like the word choice and descriptions. A sad but good poem.

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is heartbreaking. You have made this pain felt. Well done and Thanks.
Babsie Bee xx

Posted 12 Years Ago


You need something honest...
Then its good and sad.

"I feel so empty
I feel so heavy
I feel so broken"

Its almost tearing the reader apart.
Overall the throbbing pain is here and it comes out of this work beautifully.

Sad
-akash-



Posted 12 Years Ago


I honestly think this is very sad.. full of emotions that I can feel... and the part that really got me would be:

The emptiness has taken my heart
Along with every single part
That has fallen for you
And you never even knew

Oh that hurts.. to think that you would hold those emotions in.. once or twice I have fallen and not said a word so I can relate .. once in a very, very big way.. so I sure hope you get over this.. thank you for sharing!!! =)

Posted 12 Years Ago



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*Evelen*
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