Emerald Demon

"Devil take the hindmost,"

they said to me before racing off,

leaving me to ponder my efforts

to keep my fickle spirit aloft.

The sky grew a dark ashen gray;

the once joyous park seemed to sink;

the whimsical breeze became desolate,

and there was only one thing I could think.

The devil's not in Georgia today.

No, the devil's not in Georgia today.

Horns emerging from a nearby knoll,

a bloodied smirk appears, unleashing the tame.

A booming voice that shakes everything in sight,

saying, "I'm sure you know the game."

A gulp escapes behind my growing snarl.

A volcanic tear rolls past his grin.

Devil take the hindmost, mother f****r,

and I'm not going down again.

He gets no sympathy from me.

No, he gets no sympathy from me.

Reviews

[Mary]

very interesting

[kait]

this is really good i loved it : )

[StoryTailor]

Once again, the repetition was astounding!

"The devil's not in Georgia today.
No, the devil's not in Georgia today."

"He gets no sympathy from me.
No, he gets no sympathy from me."

" 'Devil take the hindmost,'...
Devil take the hindmost"

I'm sorry, I just really like people who use repetition to emphasize a point. I love that effect in writing.

What's more, the imagery was incredible here as well. But I'm afraid that's already been put to your attention. Still, I'm going to tell you that the three reviewers before me were completely correct in telling you that the imagery was nice.

[Prateeksha Khot]

Amazing poem. Vivid description. loved it

[Ruth]

Wonderful imagery here! xx

[Tyler Pryor]

Your poem utilizes imagry quite well, and it even has a prose feel to it. The ending is very intense, and i love the roling stones refrence. Nicely done.