How I wish you felt my pain

IT TALKS about how you have a love affair with someone,or relationship with someone who you have these strong confused feelings for.Like an infatuation,or something like that.

 

How I wish you felt  my pain

By Ivonne Lizarraga

My  thoughts are running wild just thinking about those nights,and how I fell into you. My mind is slowly being taken away.my thoughts fade away.Yet my heart is still beating faster.

 

I slowly start to forget how you tortured me with your charm. I wish that you felt this pain you make me feel. I keep falling into your arms as I believe every word you say.

 

Yet you never mention that phrase that says you feel my sweet pain yet maybe I'm just another fool. How I wish  you felt my sweet pain yet maybe I'm just another fool. How I wish you felt my pain I get every time I look into your bright eyes. It makes my heart melt.

 

Every time I feel comfort by your friendly charm yet my mind is so confused especially when we start to touch. As my body feels your sweet painful touch.My heart is trapped in glass walls.

 

As my soul starts to scream for help my heart wants to break free so my heart can finally feel you. Oh how i wish you felt my pain so you can understand how i truly feel so much pain when we touch.

 

How I wish you truly felt this sweet pain to-wards me Because i hate these painful games that you play with my heart. Its so cold , Oh how i wish you felt my bittersweet Pain.

Reviews

[Taylor H]

Fix your spacing after ever comma and period in these lines (and capitalize your i's)---

My thoughts are running wild just thinking about those nights,and how I fell into you. My mind is slowly being taken away.my thoughts fade away.Yet my heart is still beating

when we start to touch. As my body feels your sweet painful touch.My heart is trapped in

Oh how i wish you felt my pain so you can understand how i truly feel so much

How I wish you truly felt this sweet pain to-wards me Because i hate these painful games that you play with my heart. Its so cold , Oh how i wish you felt my bittersweet Pain.

[Britteny]

Nice poem! I liked the word choice here the words were strong and helped convey your meaning quite well. My only point of advice is the format of your poem it's nice but with a serious poem such as this one if you separate the poem out a sentence per line it might convey a stronger meaning. This is just hoe I write and a suggestion at the very most. Thanks for recommending a good read! :)

[Samuel Dickens]

I guess for as long as there have been men and women, there has been someone having these intense feelings you speak of. "My heart is trapped in glass walls".... that's a nice line--I like it.