Otherwise Perfect

And on the dirt, so simple, so pure;

The human world seems so obscure.

A world of ice, a world of snow,

In this world I have no foe.

 

Watch the snowflakes;

Watch them twirl and spin for goodness sakes.

Gracious pirouettes, see them dance,

This world is safe; let’s take a chance.

 

No footprints but mine,

Beneath the snow-laden pine;

And yet I continue to search

Among the dead gray birch.

 

Peace and serenity, utter calm,

The wind whispers too beautiful a song.

A glacial lake, encased in ice,

Drawn to this world, it is my vice.

 

A paradise of snow and ice,

A world far from men and mice;

And yet, in all respect,

Without you, it is not near perfect.

 

And though I wish to share with you,

A paradise long overdue;

For you, I endure a world askew,

For against my will, I do love you.

Reviews

[Confidential]

Clever and unpredictable rhymes in a nicely flowing, rhythmic, and highly enjoyable poem that starts out strong and never lets up! I usually include my favorite part(s) of a particular story/poem I review, but I'm having a difficult time deciding on what exactly that might be in this case! I just enjoyed the whole thing so much, but if I had to pick, I think I would probably say that my favorite parts out of the whole thing are the first and the last stanzas. Certainly keep writing poems like this, I have a feeling this is nowhere near the best you can do.

Respect,
-Confidential