Waking In The Night

when it dawns on you, what has happened...

Waking in the night
Suddenly I know
You died
You left me
But not alone
You left me
With an older
A bitter version of you
In your chair he sits
Ever watchful
Fading the memory
of someone
I once loved

Mai L. Nissen, 2011

Author's Note

Art by Ditte Løfgren
http://ditteloefgren.com

I welcome any constructive criticism and suggestions

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful and sad places you took me in the poetry.
"Fading the memory
of someone
I once loved"
Hard to watch someone fade away. The above lines said enough to make the reader feel and understand the sadness. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for your thoughts on the poem!

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome.

[Neville]

I know only too well the feeling that you more than adequately and so eloquently describe here.... All Good Things, N

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for your kind review, Neville. It is much appreciated.

[Neville]

No problem, my pleasure entirely................

[Sameer]

Times change people change, when we start to know them. Deep and tense gives the idea of what you might have gone through emotionally. Great work Mai. God bless

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for your kind words, Sameer!

[Adam Whitworth]

I appreciate this one and some of your other poems, well done

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for stopping by, Adam. I appreciate your comment :)

[ANTO]

God I just read my review and realised it was a bit inappropriate Mai. I wittered on about people drifting apart but that was me on a tangent and I hope you forgive me for having to delete it.
I revised it -
my friend whose dad passed away could do nothing but call him 'a frigger' - a derogatory term - not the worst but certainly not one I expected to hear someone describe their father, to whom they were very very close - I mean so close. Then I realise now after reading your poem that she was only saying it in bitterness at the disease which took him and because she was left without him. She did and does love him dearly and he has been gone for 7 years now but still she has that bitter glint in her eye that I understand now - is for 'the leaving' - not the one who left.
You enlightened me here. Thank you.

[Mai L Nissen]

Haha... No worries! I did not had the change to read the first one before deleted - besides that happens to me too! I am glad that the poem gave you something :)

[Jamestown]

Wow, very powerful and raw! Sad memories are hard to deal with.
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

[Mai L Nissen]

Thank you for sharing your thoughts! :)