Waking In The Night

Waking In The Night

A Poem by Mai L Nissen
"

when it dawns on you, what has happened...

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Waking in the night
Suddenly I know
You died
You left me
But not alone
You left me
With an older
A bitter version of you
In your chair he sits
Ever watchful
Fading the memory
of someone
I once loved

Mai L. Nissen, 2011

© 2015 Mai L Nissen


Author's Note

Mai L Nissen
Art by Ditte Løfgren
http://ditteloefgren.com

I welcome any constructive criticism and suggestions

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Powerful and sad places you took me in the poetry.
"Fading the memory
of someone
I once loved"
Hard to watch someone fade away. The above lines said enough to make the reader feel and understand the sadness. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mai L Nissen

5 Years Ago

Thank you for your thoughts on the poem!
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

You are welcome.



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I know only too well the feeling that you more than adequately and so eloquently describe here.... All Good Things, N

Posted 5 Years Ago


Mai L Nissen

5 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind review, Neville. It is much appreciated.
Neville

5 Years Ago

No problem, my pleasure entirely................
Times change people change, when we start to know them. Deep and tense gives the idea of what you might have gone through emotionally. Great work Mai. God bless

Posted 5 Years Ago


Mai L Nissen

5 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words, Sameer!
I appreciate this one and some of your other poems, well done

Posted 5 Years Ago


Mai L Nissen

5 Years Ago

Thank you for stopping by, Adam. I appreciate your comment :)
God I just read my review and realised it was a bit inappropriate Mai. I wittered on about people drifting apart but that was me on a tangent and I hope you forgive me for having to delete it.
I revised it -
my friend whose dad passed away could do nothing but call him 'a frigger' - a derogatory term - not the worst but certainly not one I expected to hear someone describe their father, to whom they were very very close - I mean so close. Then I realise now after reading your poem that she was only saying it in bitterness at the disease which took him and because she was left without him. She did and does love him dearly and he has been gone for 7 years now but still she has that bitter glint in her eye that I understand now - is for 'the leaving' - not the one who left.
You enlightened me here. Thank you.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mai L Nissen

5 Years Ago

Haha... No worries! I did not had the change to read the first one before deleted - besides that hap.. read more
Powerful and sad places you took me in the poetry.
"Fading the memory
of someone
I once loved"
Hard to watch someone fade away. The above lines said enough to make the reader feel and understand the sadness. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote


Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mai L Nissen

5 Years Ago

Thank you for your thoughts on the poem!
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

You are welcome.
Wow, very powerful and raw! Sad memories are hard to deal with.
Thanks for sharing and b-blessed!

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Mai L Nissen

5 Years Ago

Thank you for sharing your thoughts! :)

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