Molded to Christ

I often feel pushed & pulled by certain people around me to be & do what isn't who I believe I am meant to be & do. I'm definitely a very beginning poet, only writing poems very rarely when inspired.

I strived to fit into their mold

By putting my true self on hold.

In turn, my heart toward God went cold.

 

Though bodily I did abide

Their expectations, by heart cried:

“What if the best of me has died?!”

 

Throughout that time they lent no ear,

They gave no hug, they cried no tear.

I felt them least when they came near.

 

Anew I prayed, then turned my head

In shame from Christ, whose love I fled.

He looked at me and softly said:

 

“My love for you will always be,

So may you always come to Me

To set your burdened spirit free.

 

“And then, My perfect, holy light

May shine through you my glory bright

To break the curse of sin’s black night.”

 

Though I’m so blessed, I feel distress;

At times I doubt my giftedness�"

Which makes me see myself as less.

 

It’s Satan’s lie that I am poor,

But deep down, at my very core

I know that I was made to soar.

 

And always by my side, my mate

Is there to help me validate

Where, in God’s eyes, I truly rate.

 

The world still tries to grab a hold

And pull me back into its mold.

But thank God and my wife I’m bold

To rest in their love, and behold

The beauty that is heaven’s gold.

Author's Note

Have at it. I like poetry, but have very little ability as a poet. I'd love to get some helpful feedback. I'm OK with poor ratings, as long as you give me hope for a better poem next time.

Reviews

[Meg]

This is a beautiful, heartfelt poem that really is deeply moving. My only comment is that I don't quite understand what you mean when you say "But thank God and my wife I'm bold". If you continue to write poetry, maybe try to have a little more parallelism tying the stanzas together with your rhyming scheme, but really this was an exceptional poem. Write from the heart. Poetry is as simple as that.

[mmrom517]

Meg, thank you for your helpful and supportive critique. As one not too well-versed (pun sort of intended) in writing poetry, I welcome such posts as yours. My intent with that line you referred to was to show my belief that because of God's power working through me & my wife supporting me I can have greater courage. Sometimes I agonize over getting a line just right; sometimes I no doubt don't quite get there. Even after all my revising in just realized line 5 should read "my heart cried." Oh well, back to work, lol!

[Nicole Dunlap]

This a very thought out poem and I love it!!! I'm speechless.

[mmrom517]

Much appreciated, Nicole. I look forward to reading what you've written too.

[mmrom517]

Nobodyknows, I am a true believer, and yes this is at least semi-autobiographical. I am indeed thankful for Christ showing me His supremacy over all things of the world. I know He wants such testimonies to be shared by even the least able of writers, but I also believe that we should seek excellence in all God has given us to do. I admit I have often sought perfection in my writing before sharing it with others, which, sadly, has meant others that could have been blessed weren't. I'm seeking a middle ground--writing with excellence yet always placing priority on sharing the good news of what Christ does in my life. Thank you for reiterating that importance. Blessings.

[Nobodyknows]

I am glad to meet a fellow believer. Either way to me its beautiful and describes regeneration in its true essence. God seeking man and man always running away, just to come back again. May God keep speaking through you.

[mmrom517]

Thank you for your kind words. I'm thankful I have this story to share.

[Nobodyknows]

Honestly Sir I do not see why you wish to write a better poem??? Is it not about the greatest phenomenon you just talked about. Not only Christ but man turning away from man and running after Christ. So I either take it that you are a true believer or were you just trying to sound philosophical??