The Last Wild Place on Earth

You say you want to find me and be free.
Then you know, strung-out seeker, where to go:
Go where the mountaintops and looming trees
Choke back the pregnant firmament - but no,

I know you wouldn’t want to venture here
And scale my hill, the last wild place on Earth
Where none could shield you from the threat of fear,
Of strife, ambivalence, death, and rebirth.

The wild, where no voice can drown out my thunder
Nor any streetlamp dare outshine my sky.
And could you let your heart be rent asunder
When in a quiet breeze I pass you by?

No, “What is God that man of Him is mindful?”
What works have mine have not been shut away?
You scale the Babel tower, serene and prideful,
Then in synthetic Eden waste a day,

Cry, “Mighty are your works, O landscaper!
And let no weed spring up outside your plan.”
And, “Powerful you are, great zookeeper!
And may rogue beasts be tamed at your command.”

But hear me, untried pilgrim, hear my voice:
I cannot, and I will not, be contained.
The rose and thistle blossom by my choice,
And at my Word, the captor drops his chain.

So if you want to feel me and be free,
I dare you, wayfarer, rise up and go.
I’m not far off; just past the concrete sea,
Beyond the manufactured starlight’s glow.

Author's Note

Do any of the rhyme pairs seem forced?

Reviews

[Flower Meadow]

None of the rhymes seem forced, and the picture this paints in my mind is very vivid. Nice write.

[Maddi]

Thanks so much, Shadow!

[gloomysundays]

As the previous reviewer said, the title you have chosed for this poem is very eye-catching so extra points for that. The poem is very well-structured and a very entertaining read. This deserves notice as it's very well-written. Your vocabulary and grammar are near-perfection. I really don't have any negative comments about this. Keep writing as your work is magnificent. Good luck and happy writting!


Cheers.
100/100

You are my second 100/100 rating as I'm known to be a very tough critic on this site. I'm looking forward to reading more from you.

[Maddi]

Thank you so much, gloomysundays!

[zainul]

I am not master of rhymes.
So,I will not dig them.
I must appreciate your good intention to present a lovely piece.
The title,"The Last Wild Place on Earth" makes me very curious!

[Maddi]

Thanks, zainul! I appreciate your reading and reviewing my work.

[zainul]

You deserved it.
Hope more people will review it soon.