Imitated Obsession

Imitated Obsession

A Poem by moog-drika
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Narcissist, Homosexual or Autosexual?

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I got a glimpse of her 
  staring at me with an enchantment
    like she was trying to edit my presence.

I felt something for her.

Her inky eyes were pulling me towards her,
       it seemed like she read my newborn feelings.

Hushed interactions were going on 
making my feelings even more mature.

She kept imitating my persona
and I couldn't understand her atypical originality. 

I looked for a golden trait in her twisted soul,
a unique love,
   different from mine.

I kept wanting her to get out of the shady mirror,
yet she stood behind it.

Feelings got desperate to get her reflected existence,
      but I couldn't reach her.
A bitter insanity was eating me up.
      but I still couldn't reach her.

Losing all the breath of life, 
   my feelings took her soul with mine,
     and I was left with my expired figure.

© 2020 moog-drika


Author's Note

moog-drika
it took me 2 years (2014-12016) to write something on this theme. So I really have a deep feeling for this write. I do welcome constructive criticism. I know there are flaws in the write, I wish to modify it too since I wrote it when I was kinda amateur that time.
However, people say that this is one of the weakest pieces I wrote down. It hurt me a little thinking if it's so bad. Hence, I wanna know your opinion.

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mou
a silent roar..i like the way you penned feelings into it..

Posted 5 Years Ago


moog-drika

5 Years Ago

thank you so much :D
Wow is all I can say; wow. Nice

Posted 5 Years Ago


moog-drika

5 Years Ago

Thanks a lot for the compliment :)
Brilliantly done!! I loved the mysterious and intriguing concept of this, the reader was taken to an unknown mysterious world feeling the intrigueness of this write....I think the time it took for you to write was worthful.....Its a very catchy write and the way it started and ended was something very commendable....Well done dear poetess.....Full ratings!!!....

Posted 5 Years Ago


moog-drika

5 Years Ago

Thanks so much for the praise.. Im glad that you tried to connect your views to the piece.. It reall.. read more
Inject Positivity

5 Years Ago

You are absolutely welcome dear frnd.....My honour and pleasure....
Wow! The hook was set reading the first verse! I could feel your "newborn feelings" mature with your words. It was like you had pulled me into you skin so I could feel your anticipation, your anxiety and frustration with this intriguing creature who had captured your passion's attention.
And I love, what to me was, the gentle ambiguity of your closing verse. To me, it appeared you became resigned to accept her only as a vivid fantasy leaving your physical desire to fade and die.
Overall, the build of tension was tortuously exquisite, your word play expressed your feelings so well without falling into a sappy sing-song "love at first sight" greeting card verse. Loved it!! Gotta read more of your writing. You piqued my appetite and now I'm hungry for more!

Posted 5 Years Ago


B J Hughes

5 Years Ago

With deep respect and honor for your customs, may I ask that you please address as Bill? Thank you... read more
moog-drika

5 Years Ago

sure! :D Bill :D
B J Hughes

5 Years Ago

Regards and respect! :o)
it seems you are looking at your inner soul,but hiding your true feelings

Posted 5 Years Ago


moog-drika

5 Years Ago

i always try to look at my inner soul.. but it confuses me everytime :)
thank you so much for.. read more

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