Tumbling fall

Tumbling fall

A Poem by moog-drika

Golden vista ignites 

and dims the murmur of heat.

The breeze, punctuated by the clash, drapes a rhapsody,

to swim around the autumn.

Smearing the show with cozy serendipity,

its silhouette gives them a pungent look. 


Brisk luster looks pretty calm, 

but subtly, impatient.

© 2020 moog-drika


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oh that fall luster...this poem reminds me so much of Vermont in October...
it was breathtaking...when we lived in the Bronx, we went there every year ...such beauty.

I could not describe it with any of the ferocity that you show here with your imagery.
j.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

moog-drika

1 Week Ago

Ahh I wish I could get the taste of autumn in Vermont. We don't have fall season here it's just all .. read more



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This might be the freshest writing I've seen in weeks (reading a long line of boring predictable books lately!) Thank you for waking me up with dynamic verbs & unexpected personification ("vista ignites" . . . "drapes a rhapsody" . . . "pungent look" & many more, since every phrase is a stunner!) This poem pushes me to "UP" my game . . . I love writing that's mind-blowingly fresh, but not abstract -- still straightforward & clear as a bell! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Days Ago


moog-drika

4 Days Ago

Your review always gives me a different positive vigor. I should thank you for the pieces you write,.. read more
barleygirl

4 Days Ago

My pleasure! You've made my day, too! *smile*
A beautiful example of change. Your words are vivid. Great job.

Posted 5 Days Ago


moog-drika

4 Days Ago

Thank you so much for taking a ride :D Means a lot :D
There is something ineffable about this poem. Like Jacob says it reminds me of beautiful places but more than the place- it reminds me of the power of those places, the energy and how that energy renders human being tiny in comparison to the universe.

Posted 1 Week Ago


moog-drika

1 Week Ago

I barely got the chance to enjoy nature of fall since we don't have it here where we live. Although .. read more
Just to add a little to previous reviews, I liked the images - the rhapsody 'draped - languid in the dying heat; the swim and the 'smearing the show'.. and the sense of stillness, about to be blown apart.

Posted 1 Week Ago


moog-drika

1 Week Ago

cant describe in words how much I enjoyed viewing your thought on my piece. It gives the write more .. read more
This was beautifully descriptive in an adventuresome style. I enjoyed it very much. It actually catches the feeling of autumn between the lines drifting down like colored leaves. Very good writing. I enjoyed.

Posted 1 Week Ago


moog-drika

1 Week Ago

Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts and adding more details to the vision. So glad you like it... read more
Brisk luster looks pretty calm,
but subtly, impatient.

Fantastic! I can feel the subtle brew of feelings here...Well done!

Posted 1 Week Ago


Pestonjee

5 Days Ago

You're welcome. If I make a come back soon, its going to be because I've received inspiration from y.. read more
moog-drika

5 Days Ago

Really? I mean how? It's actually the other way round. Your words triggered to motivate me a lot. So.. read more
Pestonjee

5 Days Ago

By simply drawing upon the inspiration your words provide. I connect with them in my own way. You h.. read more
This is so fun! It reminds me of all things autumn and maple syrup. I want pancakes now, but at present I can't eat those things because my mother had gestational diabetes and I'm not taking any risks until I can actually get an appointment and find out more about how my body is reacting to its new guest.

Posted 1 Week Ago


moog-drika

1 Week Ago

Aww! I know how it feels when you have a craving for something and you don't get. The poetry was als.. read more
I read below you don't have the benefit of seeing autumn where you live. Well, that's too bad, except you also don't have winter. I'd give up fall to get rid of winter.

What you've captured, complemented by the artwork, is not only spectacular given your distant perspective but very much on point. The shortness of the poem also speaks to the shortness of the peak season (for color) and how we fall into the grayness, the decaying plants, leaves, etc. Exceptional imagery in a few short lines.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

moog-drika

1 Week Ago

Thank you so much. I have a strong craving for all the seasons to observe them and admire their uniq.. read more
I wanted actually first to write review on constructive criticism but you point me here so here I am. I like really title tumbling fall it's very good invitation cause it's make wonder what is really mean. This is like symphonic suite. Painted emotions at few shapes of personal emotions. It's give me calm feeling like I am walking in wet leaves and meet some of my friend . It's vibrating with nature and empathy. That last line can bring doubt about calmness but I think it's just taming of wild horse at wild colors of autumn leaves. Sorry if my review was,too abstractive. I enjoyed this piece.

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

moog-drika

1 Week Ago

Constructive criticism is all about what I feel about it. I wrote that to make myself feel light bec.. read more
 Poet

1 Week Ago

I think I wrote somewhere already. Poetry should be reviewed again by poetry. I really more enjoyed .. read more
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Gee
My favourite season by a stretch, described
beautifully here :)
Good morning

Posted 1 Week Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

moog-drika

1 Week Ago

thank you so much for taking a ride. So glad you like it. Means a lot :'D
Gee

1 Week Ago

Twas a pleasure to "ride" you :)))

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