Tumbling fall

Golden vista ignites 

and dims the murmur of heat.

The breeze, punctuated by the clash, drapes a rhapsody,

to swim around the autumn.

Smearing the show with cozy serendipity,

its silhouette gives them a pungent look. 

Brisk luster looks pretty calm, 

but subtly, impatient.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh that fall luster...this poem reminds me so much of Vermont in October...
it was breathtaking...when we lived in the Bronx, we went there every year ...such beauty.

I could not describe it with any of the ferocity that you show here with your imagery.
j.

[moog-drika]

Ahh I wish I could get the taste of autumn in Vermont. We don't have fall season here it's just all summer, sometimes monsoon and a little bit of winter.
Thank you so much for the praise. It really means a lot :D

[Robert Trakofler]

the autumn hues are my favorite and it is my favorite time of year the last ditch glow of seasons change makes the grandest of exits a celebration of life before the eventual decay of winter:) very well penned Moog:)

[moog-drika]

I wish to be in places where I can actually get to witness the hues of autumn evidently. I didn't extinguish the hope yet.
Thank you so much for the compliment and for sharing your thoughts. Means a lot.

[alan peter kelly]

Subtly impatient. Awesome finish. Love the alliteration. Enjoyed the read in its entirety.

[moog-drika]

Thanks a bunch for the compliment. It means a lot.

[barleygirl]

This might be the freshest writing I've seen in weeks (reading a long line of boring predictable books lately!) Thank you for waking me up with dynamic verbs & unexpected personification ("vista ignites" . . . "drapes a rhapsody" . . . "pungent look" & many more, since every phrase is a stunner!) This poem pushes me to "UP" my game . . . I love writing that's mind-blowingly fresh, but not abstract -- still straightforward & clear as a bell! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[moog-drika]

Your review always gives me a different positive vigor. I should thank you for the pieces you write, they help me so much in widening my vision. I thank you for this. Another thanks for sharing your thoughts, loving it and putting all these positive words down.
Thanks so much :'D Lots of love

[barleygirl]

My pleasure! You've made my day, too! *smile*

[duff]

A beautiful example of change. Your words are vivid. Great job.

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for taking a ride :D Means a lot :D

[adornoscousin]

There is something ineffable about this poem. Like Jacob says it reminds me of beautiful places but more than the place- it reminds me of the power of those places, the energy and how that energy renders human being tiny in comparison to the universe.

[moog-drika]

I barely got the chance to enjoy nature of fall since we don't have it here where we live. Although I love winter more, but I have a thing for this particular season. Because its the energy and power of fall that fall over all of us and the beautiful places.
So I get you. Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. :'D

[Jibey]

Just to add a little to previous reviews, I liked the images - the rhapsody 'draped - languid in the dying heat; the swim and the 'smearing the show'.. and the sense of stillness, about to be blown apart.

[moog-drika]

cant describe in words how much I enjoyed viewing your thought on my piece. It gives the write more details making it feel complete. Thank you so much :'D You made my day

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was beautifully descriptive in an adventuresome style. I enjoyed it very much. It actually catches the feeling of autumn between the lines drifting down like colored leaves. Very good writing. I enjoyed.

[moog-drika]

Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts and adding more details to the vision. So glad you like it.

[AJNJ]

Brisk luster looks pretty calm,
but subtly, impatient.

Fantastic! I can feel the subtle brew of feelings here...Well done!

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for the praise. It means a lot.

[AJNJ]

You're welcome. If I make a come back soon, its going to be because I've received inspiration from you .

[moog-drika]

Really? I mean how? It's actually the other way round. Your words triggered to motivate me a lot. So I should thank you for this. I'm really grateful to you.

[AJNJ]

By simply drawing upon the inspiration your words provide. I connect with them in my own way. You have a unique word choice.

[Kari Rakitan]

This is so fun! It reminds me of all things autumn and maple syrup. I want pancakes now, but at present I can't eat those things because my mother had gestational diabetes and I'm not taking any risks until I can actually get an appointment and find out more about how my body is reacting to its new guest.

[moog-drika]

Aww! I know how it feels when you have a craving for something and you don't get. The poetry was also a way to express how I crave the beauty of season to observe. But living around buildings stops me always. Thank you so much for your sharing your thoughts. It really means a lot.

[R.E. Ray]

I read below you don't have the benefit of seeing autumn where you live. Well, that's too bad, except you also don't have winter. I'd give up fall to get rid of winter.

What you've captured, complemented by the artwork, is not only spectacular given your distant perspective but very much on point. The shortness of the poem also speaks to the shortness of the peak season (for color) and how we fall into the grayness, the decaying plants, leaves, etc. Exceptional imagery in a few short lines.

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much. I have a strong craving for all the seasons to observe them and admire their unique traits different to each other. The feeling can be bitter or sweet or both but I would enjoy that.
Then again, too extreme will not be really pleasing. haha
Thank you again for sharing your views the poetry gave you. Means a lot.