Tense

Tense

A Poem by moog-drika
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another careless write.

"

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Past, once held current time,

continued to move coyly 

and run into experiences: queer but ripe. 

The young past, once fancied future, grew,

as time casually took shape.


Present, the future past fancied, appears, 

it walks along with time, still current but in mellow shape.

It holds past and continues to move.

There is a break in the ignition of ripe experiences. 

Half is filled with veracious vintage, 

other half is sophisticated semi-novelty. 

The present hopes to meet a mature future

while imagining its nature.


Future will be showing up

with a hefty bundle of senior experiences. 

Ignition will have more breaks, 

some slices will be valiant vintage, 

some smart semi-novelty, 

some boisterous breakthrough.

Future will look at the past and present

to converse with time. 

© 2020 moog-drika


Author's Note

moog-drika
so this is a very rough piece and something out of my comfort zone. I liked the rawness hence dared to post it. But I might modify it. There are many parts that need changes.

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Clever, because you are, and not simple, because you are not.

Posted 11 Months Ago


moog-drika

11 Months Ago

Haha you've got quite the clever twist in the comment. Thanks a bunch... *Hearts*
light and ashes

11 Months Ago

:) .......
I enjoyed reading this. Past, present and future may all be an illusion of the linear perception. Perhaps all things are connected and coming full circle but we can never see beyond the curve. If perspective is what we are lacking maybe we need the innocence of childhood to meet the wisdom of old age so we can all become children again.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Wild experiences lacking worry seeing the horizon of paying bills slowly crippling what was planned. I dig this all day.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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This is wonderful, i found this kinda emotional. Nicely written and expressed

Posted 3 Years Ago


moog-drika

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much :D
i like Raw, moog-drika...
this poem speaks to me...the past mellows in our memory...it gets molded a certain way, to a certain truth we can live with...the bad not as bad, the good even better than it was.
there is someone i miss dearly...she probably knows...she is happy with someone else...
my high school sweetheart...youth, distance, school, several circumstances severed our relationship...even
though we stayed friends...one of those what ifs..but ironically there is still a good and close feeling there, i think for both of us...we never really had the chance for it to be a "negative past."
love this poem, AS IS....

Posted 3 Years Ago


moog-drika

3 Years Ago

wow, this is such an amazing extraction that you brought out of the piece. it makes me visualize my .. read more
Interesting thoughts here and surely that's what matters, whether refined or raw., Was written that time
repeats itself because it never wears a watch.. simply: it can't, Is that why you say the following?
' Present, the future past fancied, appears, - it walks along with time, still current but in mellow shape. 'It holds past and continues to move...' Then you add of the Future, ' Ignition will have more breaks, -
some slices will be valiant vintage, - some smart semi-novelty, - some boisterous breakthrough.' So, eventually, if time actually stood still, would it be a mix of all times static, a muddle of time forever, nobody like yourself, able to analyse it and decide otherwise, I wonder. Hypothesis, yes but..

Times has fascinated and intruiged me for ages, no pun intended.. Yours is an intriguing and very interesting post, deftly written..

Posted 3 Years Ago


moog-drika

3 Years Ago

ahh I wish time could actually stand still. I hate myself to age every second.
But that's tr.. read more
emmajoy

3 Years Ago

I do more than like it; this type of post really sets my often tired brain into some kind of action... read more
I love how your treatment of past-present-future (such staid old standards) is done with abstract freshness & unexpectedness. Often my complex vocabulary garners a complaint or two & it's great to read a kindred spirit who also loves complex words & ideas. I tend to over-manicure, so I do understand the weird feeling of throwing something out there without shaping it into a definite message or style. I love the nebulous nature of what you're getting across (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 3 Years Ago


moog-drika

3 Years Ago

I actually love experimenting with complex words, and majority of my past works had that essence. Bu.. read more
memories,things from the past

Posted 3 Years Ago


moog-drika

3 Years Ago

i find myself stuck in all the three phases at the same time.
 wordman

3 Years Ago

oh well i guess we all do
Hi mugdha:) in the bones of this are some very lovely reflections I see what you mean about you feeling this is rough because the tones of this are a truly difficult subject matter to paint. this happens to me when I try to stretch my poems to an obscure and difficult reference. but in reading this I feel I get the gist and crux of your intents and they are very clever! if you still have need to modify this poem please send me a note so that I can reread it. Time is truly one of the hardest things to write about in my opinion! few things are of the nature of a distance and a contingency of succession and a constant at the same....TIME LOL

Posted 4 Years Ago


moog-drika

4 Years Ago

Thank you so much for all the positive words. Yes, it is indeed a complex theme to think about and I.. read more
I read this again and again and each time I read it, it made more sense, giving me the satisfaction of finally cracking a jigsaw. And the last lines, 'future will look at the past and present to converse with time', so absolutely creative. Made me muse about the sheer beauty of such a realisation. Kudos to you.

Posted 4 Years Ago


moog-drika

4 Years Ago

I actually wanted that perplexed feeling from the readers. :D thanks so much for sharing your though.. read more

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Hey this is Mugdha, a thought poker, a life giver of words. I'm mostly into dark poetry and have a great appetite for reviving inanimate souls. I think they love me for this gesture but that's my pa.. more..

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