Eventide

Twilight weighs lighter than daylight,

dreams to be fairer than a groaning night

of minty outlooks.

Painting itself with sober colors,

         it leaves a brighter attitude

triggering blue to exhale red,

         making the energy harlequin,

                            with a slight scent of dawn. 

After-effect observes how 

it lets violet twist with orange, how

it quivers peach and yellow,

just to underline its integrity and outshine popular hours.

Reviews

[Kari Rakitan]

This has a lovely rhythm. I have a tts plugin that reads aloud to me, so I can say that if it sounds this good with a computer voice, it will surely sound amazing with a human voice.

[moog-drika]

I can say that it will surely not sound good with my voice since I have got the worst one haha. But people who are expert in the art of reading can do it great for sure. Thank you so much for the praise. It means a lot.

[emmajoy]

Reminds me of a controlled experiment, one addition setting off another and another and.. colour this or that taking over from another reaction of say - yellow and blue flowing into green, How lovely this kind of eventide. More than likely begun by a defined dawn. But, time come.. almost suddenly, a careful slip and slide down between two hills, THEN! a sudden pouring of liquid colour. You've created such a subtle yet exotic sight in words, Think i'll sit and read this all day!

[moog-drika]

I'm amazed by this interpretation. I wish I could steal this imagery of yours. Adding this backdrop to the write makes it even more fascinating. Thank you so much for such a gorgeous present. It really means a lot.

[emmajoy]

Firstly, I love dusk.. but admit that reading your words is, was, quite special, such graphic touches .. such glorious phrasing, I like to read slowly, close eyes,inagine for myself. Wull read more, anther time.

[moog-drika]

I do that too when I read. It helps me visualize more clearly. Thanks a lot again

[emmajoy]

Returned to read your beautiful words yet again... they are like a masterpiece hanging in a famous gallery... so beautiful!

[moog-drika]

Honestly no words can express what I am feeling right now. Even thank you is not enough but still saying it.
Thank you so much dear. This is what keeps me positive and motivated.
It really means a lot

[emmajoy]

You give, you share and it should be appreciated. Realised after adding to my older review, that your words remind me of a prism hanging at a sunshone window. Bright and beautiful!

[moog-drika]

I envy your art of thoughts. Then again, I love losing myself there forgetting my canvas.

[Fran Marie]

I like how this piece
entwines each color
into a beautiful setting

your violets twisting with orange
with peach and yellow
quivering to outshine
the others..this is such
vivid imaging of each part
daylight twilight and dawn
It all comes together quite
nicely.

.well done

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts on the write as well as for the praise. Means a lot. :D

[Chris Shaw]

Your image which inspired this poem is sizzling. I loved the colours, shapes and movement. It looked as though the earth was on fire, red hot flames and billowing clouds of dark smoke. Your interpretation in words, so poetically executed did it more than justice. Great work.

Chris

[moog-drika]

This interpretation made the write more vivid and beautiful. Love it.
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts. It just made my eventide :D

[Chris Shaw]

You are more than welcome dear poet.

[Franky]

Goodness! You are a poet. I'm humbled by this write.
You write beautifully.

[moog-drika]

Thank you so much for the praise. It really means a lot.

[Robert Trakofler]

hmm every once in a while I feel like somehow you are related to me:/ the wording in this... is delicious!
the imagery is gorgeous and the intent is lovely and it also happens to be my favorite time as well:) the battle between them twice a day is by far my favorite hours! nicely done Moog Drika

[moog-drika]

It's a pleasure for me to receive these words coming from you. Evening is my favorite time as well so I can say the same. :'D
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and for the praise. So glad you like it. This made my eventide. :D

[barleygirl]

I can see how your poem was inspired by the art, in terms of colors. I love the opening becuz your concept seems the opposite of what many people think -- that day is better than night. After reading twice & not sure I was grasping your message fully, I am thinking this might be a unique & unexpected way to say that darkness makes a better backdrop becuz we have to know the depths in order to contrast them to the highs of life (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[moog-drika]

Like I always say, I keep my write up unmeaning. I just gave Eventide a character and left the door open for you to take a ride and share your thoughts. I'm so happy to view the write in such a different angle through your interpretation. This is what I was looking for, a fresh meaning and message that can make the write worth visualizing. I really love your interpretation and agree with darkness being a better backdrop. Thanks so much. It really means a lot.

[duff]

It's a a great piece of writing that implores us to stop to appreciate the beauty. I look at life like a light switch. It can be turned off anytime so enjoy the colors, smells and everything else that lifts us up because our number can be called at any moment. Nice job my friend!

[moog-drika]

Yup, I try to never miss any chance of appreciating the beauty of nature. This is what keeps me cheery. thanks so much for sharing your thoughts my friend. So glad you like it. :'D

[Lorry]

I tjink uou nailed it here from first line onwards, which is the reason we can forget all our woes at such a sight and stop, pause and reflect in a way that can re energize us, calming our non stop mind from fighter pilot stress levels, down to a slight panic and lower... If only we took the time to notice natures dance more.
Beautifully captured.

[moog-drika]

Ahh I really miss going out and observing the dance of nature. my home is all crowded with skyscrapers who look frustrated themselves.
Anyway, thank you so much for the compliment as well as for sharing your thoughts. Even if I can't notice it live, I have imagination that helps me get re energized.

[likhon]

This is really poetic. It's a simple write-up compared to other heavy metaphorical poems that you write. But this one evokes the feelings effortlessly. I would love to be able to write in such a descriptive way

[moog-drika]

irony is I had a hard time transforming this theme into words because there were a lot of things going on and it became pretty harder.
And you already have a knack for writing with beautiful details. moja niona :3
however, thanks a bunch for sharing your thoughts on it. :'D

[likhon]

I am yet to be published though. And you're welcome :p