How It Slipped Away

How It Slipped Away

 

Seven days with him

And it's given up

Two minds of lust,

Exploring birds and bees and such

So what....he's my boyfriend.

So what.

You say I should've been more reluct?

 

I wasnt ready for this

Never was ready for this

This kind of nature, this sort of adult bliss

One night, one kiss

One hit, one miss

And to think we weren't even at the gist...

 

Once, twice

Pain enticed

Thrice

I told him to turn off the lights...

 

Love in a deep dark obscurity

Only to hide my insecurites

'You're beautiful, and I never felt this way'

Did he really mean it? What did he WANT to say?

'No, I dont love you, it's just for today'

'Don't get your little feelings disarrayed and dismayed'

 

So I picked up my garments from his dirty floor

Called my mom and he showed me the door

I mean, could I really deserve much more?

Than to be called an easy giving, booty calling, w***e?

 

This was an evanescent feeling

Didn't really need much healing

It took two seconds for the hurt to fade

I then felt enlightened, this was only an escapade

To run away from rules and regulations

Go against my parents, and toward temptation

I took the next step to a huge degradation

To look back and hate myself for it being taken,

Unmistakened

 

What? I should've waited till marriage you say?!

Well maybe I should've,

But It slipped away

Author's Note

This is the first actaul poem i have on this website sohope you guys enjoy, please give any tips, or any pointers on how i can become a better writer. thx :)

Reviews

[fawnavalentine]

Okkkk so I believe in harsh criticism.
The parts I don't like is where you used words like, oh, "booty-calling w***e."
And, "Did he mean it?" type lines, honestly, sound like a babbling teenage chick.
I mean, it's just me but it's way au courant and kinda disrupts the whole flow.
And in some parts it sounds like you used a rhyming dictionary instead of your heart.
What I really did like though, is the lines where you were vague, like "Once, twice, pain enticed, I told him to turn out off lights" Nice work! You'll go places :))

[Jesi]

I really like this poem. I can relate to it as well as many other people. thank you for sharing with us :)

[Dilan Gray]

I love this poem, it is wonderful! Completely amazing. I like how it can speak to a lot of people, like me for example. People who have experienced something close to this maybe. Anyway, the images are wonderful as well as the words! Great job!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was a good write. I mean you learned a lesson from it...and then other people can learn from that lesson. So I liked this a lot. It was kinda twisted...since all men can be jerks when it comes to that...thanks for sharing. :)

[Peter Joseph Swanson]

Great poem!

[{A}shley {B}lack @-;-]

Fantastic Asia I really feel the emotion emitting from this work and I feel so sorry for the character
I especially liked the first acts of the penetration how they caused pain I don't mean this in a sadistic way but just so descriptive and puts imagery in my head your truly a great writer

the last section for me was very well thought out the rebellious behaviour and wanting to go against our parents wishes I can defiantly associate myself with
please write more poems I crave your next piece of work well done again Asia xxxxxxxx