The Stalker

He smelt it as she passed by him while jogging. That lemony, fresh smell that came out of her hair as she was running. The same smell that came out of her lingerie drawer, the one contained in the shampoo and lotion bottles in her bathroom cabinet. Ah! How he loved going through her things, touching what she had touched, lying down on the sheets she had slept on, inhaling the same air she had breathed in.

 And now her jogging was coming to an end. Soon, she would be upstairs, taking her clothes off, checking herself in the mirror, right before taking a shower. And today was special. He was in for a treat. She had forgotten to take the blinds down. He got so excited at the idea that he didn't think to check the road before crossing. He really should have, though. Because, then, he would have seen the truck coming straight at him. And, now, he wouldn't be lying lifeless on the street. And he wouldn't have missed her graceful movements as she was taking her clothes off.

 At least he still had her smell. The lemony, fresh smell in the last breath he ever took.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

YOU FREAK! Only a freak of a similar feather could’ve written something so true-to-life! *smile* I was mesmerized by your careful storytelling, such a brief vignette, but chock full of delicious details told with vivid imagery! These very short snippets are perfect length for short attention spans online. It’s wise to get good at telling such a quickie with a punch, as you’ve done here. I need to go practice doing this while your inspiration is fresh in my mind (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for your encouraging review!I'm glad that you find the story realistic and that you enjoyed the details and imagery!It means a lot to me!

[Neil P]

That escalated quickly! loved it, great closing sentence :D

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you!I'm glad you liked it!

[April Blue]

Wow, I really love this .. I love the imagery in this.. Wonderfully done..

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you so much!I appreciate it!

[Nate]

Very good i love it ,some of your words correspond why not write poems

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you!

[Ardra]

That's a power packed little story there...
The ending was a sure a new twist... :)

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you!I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Ayesha]

Wee.. thats so cheesy and cute somehow, I believe. And this expression 'that lemony fresh smell' just fits so perfectly.

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for reading!

[Craig2591]

Definitely an unexpected and creepy ending. Well written and easy to read.

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you!I'm glad you enjoyed it!

[Paul Bell]

There must be a moral in this story somewhere.
Stalkers everywhere beware.
When the blinds have gone.
Don't think you're in for a treat.
Cos when she exposes her all.
You're in for a fall.
Under a truck.
What's that smell.
Is it lemony hell.
Great story.

[Ms Paragon]

Thank you for your time to read and comment!

[Ana Papaya]

poetic justice, love it!
I really enjoyed that ending

[Ms Paragon]

I am glad you liked it!Thank you!