Eternity in hell

Eternity in hell

A Poem by SarahCortland

An ending in which we fear

The Walls are fire
The bodies are burned
We have one thing in common
None of us have learned

People are screaming
People are dying
We can't  leave this place
Your fears aren't lying

Our choices brought us here 
Our lives are done
We had our chance 
Now he has won

Here we will remain
Here we will end our life
We will die burning
For eternity we will live in strife

© 2010 SarahCortland

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Interesting, very interesting. you following the traditional christian belief of hell. Nice description.

Posted 10 Years Ago

"We have one thing in common
None of us have learned "
Very cool.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Good write. I like how you had a 'consistency' in the beginning of each stanza. Good message overall, well conveyed.

Posted 10 Years Ago

Very good write here with excellent imagery.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Posted 10 Years Ago

I love your imagery and your writing. Great poem

Posted 10 Years Ago

Beautiful, your rhyme and flow is much more consistant than it was on your other poems. I loved this. Sad and painful but beautiful!!!! good job

Posted 10 Years Ago

This is sad, once again....but good :)

Posted 10 Years Ago

This is one write that can really move the soul
This tells a life that is living in peace but one day
will prosper. I like this.

Posted 10 Years Ago

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Added on May 4, 2010
Last Updated on May 14, 2010
Tags: Hell



Owensboro, KY

My name is Myspace Layouts. I love to Write poetry and I am currently working on one book. Sometimes I write short stories but Poetry is what i like to Stick to. Confidence Quotes .. more..


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