Final goodbye

My goodbye to my "Ex"

 I decided to let you go
I wont say another word
I won't bother to call
I hope you heard

I can't keep hanging on
While you let go
and I cry
I hope you know

I care more than anything
I love you I do
My heart is breaking
My soul all blue

I've given up
because you want me leave
I keep hurting
I continue to grieve

Though I won't say a word
I won't tell a soul
you were my life
now pain fills me full

So I'm gonna go
there's not a reason to try
I hope you heard
my final goodbye

Reviews

[kirstey Lost,Crushed,Co..]

Really sad but true :/
some bits are shorter then others with the flow but i love it all the same :D

[GunMetal]

This is very sad and honest. I like it, and it's something people can relate to. I feel though that your rhythm is a bit inconsistent, and it left some lines hanging in the air. For example:
"I decided to let you go
I wont say another word
I won't bother to call
I hope you heard"
'I hope you heard' has a shorter rhythmic feel to it than the rest of this stanza. I would suggest adding 'really' for the sake of flow.
'I really hope you heard'
Other than that, the content is fine. There is alot of feeling here.

[Sabbath_Nikole]

"I'm gonna go" sounds a little outa place with the rest of the poem, the poem as a whole sounds pretty formal. I dig it though, been there done that, moved on.

[AmeliaMae]

This is very very good and intense I always love your writing. Keep writing :)

[Keevan]

sweet and simple. very nice :)

[C.J.G.]

simple and sweet.

one thing, I would somehow arrange the stanzas to makes it in sequence, somehow... unless it already is, and I am just not seeing it!

very beautiful.

[Tara♥Undefined&h..]

This is beautifully written and the pain and sadness you describe is very real and I understand the feelings well. I hope that if you felt these words, that you will find your piece of happiness in the world that you deserve. Keep writing. Your fantastic at it.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I felt the separation and the distance between the two souls. The smoke is ever present, but the fire is long gone. The smoke is the proof of the love that once was. This is the imagery I imagined. You let us all know how it felt.

[Senseless whatever]

Sweet and simple, but bleeding with emotion. Very nice write.