Fall into the sky

I walked onto a dandelion,
and into it I fell.
A forest fit for flying,
so I knew to hold on well.

A trunk to wrap my arms around,
to set a'sail on the breeze,
we rode the current way above the ground,
and raced the wading bumble bees.

And as I soared, I knew I saw,
a difference in the sky;
in this world there're worlds much more,
some low and some quite high.

Reviews

[Tony Jordan]

I felt a tad trippy reading this. Like observing a fractal world unfolding on a laptop screen.
But it was a nice trip. Then a nodding head trip as the end came and I felt it had been a worthwhile journey.
Nice one Lauren Sarah

[Lauren Sarah]

That's great that you felt that way Tony, I'm glad that the descriptions were able to conjure that!
Thanks so much :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"in this world there're worlds much more,
some low and some quite high."
I totally agree! There is so much more to this world then we can ever know! I liked reading this..

[Lauren Sarah]

I think there is a huge amount out there that we just have no idea about... Exciting to think about!
Thanks so much for your kind words!

[Dr. YumnaKay]

Yes indeed! You are welcome! It was a pleasure! :)

[mattavelli]

Hello, Lauren! :)
I enjoyed your poem. Your words put images in my head, a fantasy adventure.

[Lauren Sarah]

Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it! :)

[Gee]

Hi Lauren. Enjoyed the read, just wished it had all followed the first stanza regarding rhyming and cadence as that was super.

[Lauren Sarah]

Thanks for the advice! I really have to say that I haven't studied poetry and don't know a lot about how they should be structured or anything so I just go by what sounds right to me but I'll keep what you said in mind for next time!