A Moment of Silence

The feelings and thoughts of my heart...

Sometimes....

In a very moment of silence -

I could see a reflection,

A reflection...

of the brightest moment I've ever had.

A reflection...

of the loving people.

and

A reflection...

of the very gloomiest day I've been through.

I could barely see all reflections -

of my delight,

of my guilt,

of my life.

It never disappears...

and so here I am,

sink in a moment of silence -

In the peculiar LIFE of my own...

Reviews

[William Liston]

Silence is such a good topic to write about. Put simply, "silence can speak the loudest words sometimes." I enjoyed your descriptions and repetition in this piece. The word "reflection" in the first part really helped to create a dream like feel, reminiscent of the almost random thoughts that come to mind when everything is silent. The last line was especially powerful because it reflects how one can feel after exploring their deepest thoughts. You did well with this piece.

If I may critique, there are some changes in punctuation I think you should make. For grammatical correctness, I would put a period after the last line of the second stanza, not a comma. In the fourth line of the third stanza, I would put a comma instead of a period.

For the sake of the visual presentation, I would change the font to Georgia size 12, which, in my opinion, is the best font this site has to offer. It makes the poem easier to read too.

Hope you found this helpful.

- William Liston

[Ian Richard]

Thank You William ...
Your review is very very helpful, I will be better next time..
You've made my day and I want to make more and more poems...
I will use your wonderful tips in my further poems..
Once again, thank you so much :D

[Lord of mad men]

Very nice. It makes one think deeply about there own life. Most are full of sad and happy moments. But some are full of more deeper feeling that mau haunt ones mind.

[brian]

Introspective, much like life.