The lonely girl

The lonely girl

A Poem by Brave girl
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a little story , on a breeze

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Caught inside a room full of fears 
lied down in  a bed of a million tears,
the lonely girl hides away from pain
keeping the world locked out
as her life swirled down the drain.
laying in a bed of a million tears, she sees no end to the pain;
walking that slow walk 
death is the only thing left to obtain.
wrapping that neckless around her neck with tears in her eyes
to the pain she says her goodbyes
but inher time of healing,she finds something she didn't expect,
someone with whom she can connect.
the two laugh and talk as they work to get healthy together,
they bond and grow so close, it's like they were held by a tether.
the lonely girl heals her mind, and make to her torture an end,
and finally she leaves with a best friend.

         THE LONELY GIRL IS NO LONGER LONELY!!

© 2013 Brave girl


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Lovely piece of poetry ringing in my ears lonely girl no more lets run and cheer she left loneliness behind to find a good man and a bottle of wine they share the joy of love missing from each others lives and there are bells rings and a family grows they let everyone know their love is true and they shall be happy ever after Till the end of time. Great piece of poetry written for the loneliest of lovers everywhere.

Posted 5 Years Ago


Beautiful piece.
I really loved this piece, the whole storyline was great.
Your rhyming is brilliant, only makes your poems better.
I like how this piece has sad, depressing emotions, but then a happy ending.
I mean who doesn't love a happy ending.
We all need someone to pick us up when we are down.
Or sometimes someone who can relate to us, when it seems no one else quite understands.
Really great piece :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

Thanks ,it means alot to me,especially this peice ... thanks again for reading my work =D
cimmy wuv xxxooo

6 Years Ago

Anytime :)
My heart breaks reading this. Especially when i see your pretty smile. I do hope you smile more than you cry sweet girl. You do deserve it you know!

Beautifully written poem.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

awwww thank you so much,it means the world to me =)
So sad, but the end has a kind of unique beauty to it. Great write!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you so much!!
Moon

6 Years Ago

No problem
She dies anyway? =o
I don't like that ending... But I do love the story twist in the middle.
I can see where this would make a great story or book.
Well done. ^^

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

it's life so it's gotta hurt a little,thanks for the review
Bluefire

6 Years Ago

True. ^^ You're welcome.
This is inspiring! Very nice job.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you!
What a great ending. Great job!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you...with a sad ^poem i thought it needed a bit of hope and joy at the end,i mean life is mo.. read more
i like the climax .... the end is superb :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thanks ,i appreciate it :)
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ron
A very happy end to a sad poem. I love how you took something so sad and made it into something possitive and happy.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brave girl

7 Years Ago

the story of my life, lol! thanks for the review :)
ron

7 Years Ago

Your very welcome
a very nice bringing out positivity. liked it :)

one line i am bit unsure - ''the lonely girl heals her mind, and make to her torture an end'', 'make' seems somewhat inappropriate, cant it be changed to something more appropriate like wouldn't 'sees her torture to an end' be more correct.

best wishes.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brave girl

7 Years Ago

thank you for your honest review :)
Prritiy

7 Years Ago

you are welcome :)

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