Will you?

Will you?

A Poem by Brave girl
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so many question going on my head and i think this the only way i can express a few of them,i hope you enjoy it

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Will you remember me when I'm gone?
Will you wake up praying for me at dawn?
Will you remember me,
when my soul into my body will never be?
Will you miss me,
when the reason why you can't even see?
Will you love me the same way,
when I won't be there for you day by day?
Will you remember me??
Will you remember ,
how hard it was to feed my soul?
Or complain about how hard it was to fill that hole?
would you dare?
Oh do you ever care?!

© 2014 Brave girl


Author's Note

Brave girl
I hope you'll like it, and i admire your criticism :)

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It's sad that you don't really appreciate what you have until it's gone or taken away from you, whatever it is. It's even worse feeling being the person that isn't appreciated. Not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's what I took from it. There's raw feeling in this, it gives it a real authentic feel, likes it more specific that just a vague thought, as if it's directed towards someone real. Making this real.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you for ur nice review =)



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I wonder these same questions often. It's hard to find those people who really do care, and want to be in your life for the long haul, and always remember you. I know the feeling. Thanks for sharing this lovely poem.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

aww thank you so much for the nice review, i really appreciate it; and yes i'm having a hard time lo.. read more
Beautiful! I wasn't sure about the line, "when the reason why you can't even see." Sounded a little bit forced. But other than that, very beautiful! reflects questions we ask ourselves sometimes

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you so much!! i'm very happy that you liked it =D
This is a great way of expressing those questions that we all ask ourselves at some time.
You have cleverly manged to make rhyming couplets too.
Lovely piece of writing no matter what others may think.
Very well done.
Clive.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

aw thank you so much for the sweet review, i appreciate it =D
and yeah i shouldn't really car.. read more
Delete it. I've never been one for question and answer poems because they are blunt and have no beautiful expression or imagery or one strong meaningful statement. They are devoid of the qualities poems should have.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

no i won't delete it;because i love it and i love every line in there!
Beautiful poem about broken love.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you for the review :)
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The answer is Yes I do, still I do and also miss her....but seems like past had hurt me more! Nice poetry like it!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thanks so much =D
Simple and sweet Brave girl. By the way what is your name? but the poem captures the emotion. best wishes.


Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you for the sweet review =D
Very personally intense poem; there can be nothing wrong when expressing your feelings!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you so much :)
Michael Stevens

6 Years Ago

You're quite welcome!
Innocent expectations are all i see here :) It was an enjoyable read :) Thank you to share..

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you for the sweet review :)
I really enjoyed this it make me ask some personal question and think about what the answers would be it reminds me of the linkin park song leave out all the rest

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thanks i'm glad you liked it :)

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