Will you?

Will you?

A Poem by Brave girl
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so many question going on my head and i think this the only way i can express a few of them,i hope you enjoy it

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Will you remember me when I'm gone?
Will you wake up praying for me at dawn?
Will you remember me,
when my soul into my body will never be?
Will you miss me,
when the reason why you can't even see?
Will you love me the same way,
when I won't be there for you day by day?
Will you remember me??
Will you remember ,
how hard it was to feed my soul?
Or complain about how hard it was to fill that hole?
would you dare?
Oh do you ever care?!

© 2014 Brave girl


Author's Note

Brave girl
I hope you'll like it, and i admire your criticism :)

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It's sad that you don't really appreciate what you have until it's gone or taken away from you, whatever it is. It's even worse feeling being the person that isn't appreciated. Not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's what I took from it. There's raw feeling in this, it gives it a real authentic feel, likes it more specific that just a vague thought, as if it's directed towards someone real. Making this real.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you for ur nice review =)



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To be honest, I don`t find any criticisms in this write. It`s well penned with the deep thought-invoking words ~~ your feelings`re shown through this short-piece of your creation. The feelings`re strong so the love of yours is ... Nice poem. I`m going to look forward reading your stuffs!

Posted 6 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you sooooooooo much i really appreciate it =D
Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you sooooooo much i really appreciate it =D
That was greatly done..
No one can forget, but people ignore inorder to live ..
well done

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brave girl

6 Years Ago

thank you that is very sweet :)
Very intense and meaningful piece. Your emotions were poured out and it was felt. Very good job! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brave girl

7 Years Ago

thank you,i'm glad that u liked it =D
That is exactly what we ask our loved ones when the time comes for the goodbyes.
Beautiful :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brave girl

7 Years Ago

thank you for the sweet review!
We all want to be remembered by somebody. Hopefully well.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brave girl

7 Years Ago

thank you ......:)
Neatly crafted and you have a beautiful poet in you, good job

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brave girl

7 Years Ago

thank you that's so sweet of you :)
A. Amos

7 Years Ago

You're most welcome
Brave girl

7 Years Ago

............=D
Like they say:" You should if you could."

Posted 7 Years Ago


You have asked some very important questions for you beloved when the time comes for departure. A very good rhyming poem. Pen on...:)......................

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

You are welcome. Take care...:)........
Brave girl

7 Years Ago

you too dear writer!
Sami Khalil

7 Years Ago

:)............................
nicely done.
but i recommend you to use colors...just suggesting.teehee
but still...great ending the poem.

Posted 7 Years Ago


Brave girl

7 Years Ago

thank you it's nice of you to say that! :)
=Kirakishou=

7 Years Ago

you're welcome :D

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