Will you?

so many question going on my head and i think this the only way i can express a few of them,i hope you enjoy it

Will you remember me when I'm gone?

Will you wake up praying for me at dawn?

Will you remember me,

when my soul into my body will never be?

Will you miss me,

when the reason why you can't even see?

Will you love me the same way,

when I won't be there for you day by day?

Will you remember me??

Will you remember ,

how hard it was to feed my soul?

Or complain about how hard it was to fill that hole?

would you dare?

Oh do you ever care?!

Author's Note

I hope you'll like it, and i admire your criticism :)

Reviews

[tyson]

It's sad that you don't really appreciate what you have until it's gone or taken away from you, whatever it is. It's even worse feeling being the person that isn't appreciated. Not sure if that's what you were going for, but that's what I took from it. There's raw feeling in this, it gives it a real authentic feel, likes it more specific that just a vague thought, as if it's directed towards someone real. Making this real.

[Brave girl]

thank you for ur nice review =)

[Stephen]

To be honest, I don`t find any criticisms in this write. It`s well penned with the deep thought-invoking words ~~ your feelings`re shown through this short-piece of your creation. The feelings`re strong so the love of yours is ... Nice poem. I`m going to look forward reading your stuffs!

[Brave girl]

thank you sooooooooo much i really appreciate it =D

[Brave girl]

thank you sooooooo much i really appreciate it =D

[stars are far]

That was greatly done..
No one can forget, but people ignore inorder to live ..
well done

[Brave girl]

thank you that is very sweet :)

[Chris Micha]

Very intense and meaningful piece. Your emotions were poured out and it was felt. Very good job! :)

[Brave girl]

thank you,i'm glad that u liked it =D

[Nour Al-Hajj]

That is exactly what we ask our loved ones when the time comes for the goodbyes.
Beautiful :)

[Brave girl]

thank you for the sweet review!

[Baby Ricochet]

We all want to be remembered by somebody. Hopefully well.

[Brave girl]

thank you ......:)

[A. Amos]

Neatly crafted and you have a beautiful poet in you, good job

[Brave girl]

thank you that's so sweet of you :)

[A. Amos]

You're most welcome

[Brave girl]

............=D

[Sami Khalil]

Like they say:" You should if you could."

[Sami Khalil]

You have asked some very important questions for you beloved when the time comes for departure. A very good rhyming poem. Pen on...:)......................

[Brave girl]

thank you very much i appreciate it :)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome. Take care...:)........

[Brave girl]

you too dear writer!

[Sami Khalil]

:)............................

[=Kirakishou=]

nicely done.
but i recommend you to use colors...just suggesting.teehee
but still...great ending the poem.

[Brave girl]

thank you it's nice of you to say that! :)

[=Kirakishou=]

you're welcome :D