Poetry Exercise #1, Take 3

Poetry Exercise #1, Take 3

A Poem by Naomi Bloom
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A poem modeled after William Carlos Williams' poem The Red Wheelbarrow.

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so much depends upon

an empty check-out line


a late Saturday night

under fluorescent lights


the slouching, arrogant walk

of a young man with power


an answer to a “how are you?”

a sleek black car

© 2013 Naomi Bloom


Author's Note

Naomi Bloom
A writing exercise for a poetry class.

We wrote with this template in mind, a poem by William Carlos Williams:

so much depends
upon

a red wheel
barrow

glazed with rain
water

beside the white
chickens.

This is the third of my many attempts to imitate this form.

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Thank you for including the template. At first I was trying to concretely connect each stanza and then I realized it could be a bit looser than that. I especially like that first stanza because it is so true. I also like the imagery of the slouching arrogant walk of a young man with power- I see his arms swinging by his sides.

Posted 8 Years Ago


Naomi Bloom

8 Years Ago

Thank you! :)

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Naomi Bloom
Naomi Bloom

Ontario, Canada



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