Tuesday

ball gown

for tuesday afternoon

doing dishes

at the sink

heels

and lipstick

grime

and bubbles

singing with the radio on

Reviews

[Natasha]

From the back of the closet
where it has been hanging for years
untouched
alone
yet glamourous
A deep purple ball gown
tight on top
with a bell of endless fabric to the floor

Hot hair iron on the sink’s edge
Lipstick and mascara brushes
litter the bathroom counter... and floor

Step into round-toed, silky, three-inch heels

What is the occasion?
Tuesday afternoon!

Now, back to work. House to Clean. Dishes to be done.

Chores are not so ordinary
Dancing in a ball gown
Singing with the radio on!

[OnceUponATimeWriter]

I liked this. It's simple and the way you have set it out grabs my attention. You draw me into the situation and with very few words create the scene.

[Delilah Plain]

I agree with Ian Porter. You need to add more. Poems often tell a story. You never see a poem that doesn't. Try thinking about this when you write. What you wrote kind of sounds like a song chorus. Just add more and you'll be golden! :)

[Ian Porter]

Natasha, yes a poem does not have to rhyme but it does need pieces to connect the magic a Poem should be giving. Such as the use of vowels, or consonants in words that connect a meaning an bring emotion. For instance: " ball gown, yes it my gown from scrubin all the grime down on tue afternoon....." I hope I have helped you. And look forward to reading more of your work.