Wishes

I tried to write about hope and despair, but I'm not sure if it sounds as if it is. Do read, and please enjoy my messof words.

A wish upon a star, 

To flee a dying planet.

Till a longing daisy grew, 

Plastering the evening sky 

To pardon a naught.

Forgive and forget for

Forevers are well overdue.

Author's Note

Drop comments if you so desire. Tell me what you think?

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Loved the content - poetic dualism of hope and despair. Can I make a suggesting to 'strengthen' the write:

A tried to wish upon a star,
and escape this dying planet!

Till a longing daisy grew,
plastering the twilight sky.

To pardon a naught,
of forgives and forgets.

As forever’s,
are well overdue.

Just a thought ... :-) PS I know this is my second review - but I can't help myself when I see a good write!

[jaybeth]

Good things really come in small packages, touching without having to say much.

[Natehy]

Thank you Jay, that is what i had hoped to achieve. (-:

[Phill Oz O'fee]

I find the message clear within your poignant write - ‘Despair’ is the inaction that keeps us down; ‘Hope’ is the will to create a better tomorrow. Good poetic composition!

[The earth (Titan maphah..]

love it to the core... very well written

[mournful bear]

nice! but it's hard to forget sometimes the things these "people" do around and to use. have a beautiful writing novel!

[Coyote Poetry]

I hope we don't need a new planet. We may? I understand the statements in the poem. Thank you Natehy for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Natehy]

Ah, a new planet is well needed indeed!
Thank you for the review :-)

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome.

[wordman]

till a longing daisy grew,this says it all

[Natehy]

Whatever do you mean?

[wordman]

who knows !

[Natehy]

I was being serious 😂 I'd like to know what you're thinking of that one specific line

[wordman]

well the poem seemed to stem from that line,,it stood out to me the best line of the poem,and it summed up the poem nicely

[Bryanna]

short, and sweet - beautifully written!

[Natehy]

Thank you so much :-)