lost inbetween

lost inbetween

A Poem by Natehy
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please read and enjoy

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The desperation of 
loving someone who
doesn't mirror suit. 

Whatever the case is 
the most wanted 
feeling is to be safe. 

Tethered together til
time tells the 
unwanted departure. 

but all in this 
small and quite domain 
suddenly starting to fade.

The forced silhouettes 
replace the shapes and 
ever etched faces. 

Fluttering toward an 
open space where 
palpability pours past.

An isolation that 
lingers lost and 
lasts lividly.

The solitude that 
converses with the 
stars in the sky. 

Splitting the air 
into decisions and 
inhaling insufferable insanity.

© 2017 Natehy


Author's Note

Natehy
ignore any mistakes you've seen, but do tell what's on your mind

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Love the alliteration; gives a melodic quality

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is a part of you that you never show, it's deep down in your heart but when it shows it speaks the true sense of life! Great penning!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

a touching write,telling a story from the heart

Posted 4 Years Ago


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For me, this started out strong. However, I felt the flow was interrupted by the alliteration in verses 6 & 7. Perhaps it's too much? Everything else seems to work.

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Natehy

4 Years Ago

I get where you're coming from, care to explain more in depth? Stanza 6 is a continuation from the 5.. read more
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Kate W

4 Years Ago

Reading it again and again, I trip over two words; 'palpability and lividly. I can only explain that.. read more

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Added on November 22, 2017
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Tags: #time, #desperation, #safe, #isolation, #space, #desolate

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Natehy
Natehy

Long beach , CA



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