silent as a candlelight

looking back.

i am silent as a candlelight,
wondering where the stars are tonight.

has the wind finally blown them away?
wish i came early with my good-byes to say.

the new moon knows nothing
of where the stars are drifting now,
not the jet black skies,
nor the dark silver clouds.

and this candlelight flame that sways
in rather the most random of ways,
burning vermillion is my lone companion.
or perhaps, is it dancing on a melody
which it's so greedy enough share?

if so, then i am truly alone.
with no wishing stars, no even a spark, to my night.
do i even have a night to call my own?

it's a windless but cold silence,
the evening inquires me where you are.
if i seek for you in the dark.
is there a chance i'll find you?

i long for your burning embrace,
no, i know all i need is to see you face.
unfreeze me once more with your feverish grace
you've vanished and managed to leave no trace.

i miss you
i love you
i need you here and now.

we had years full of smiles and tears
but none of them can matter somehow
cos right at this hour, i miss you
and that's all i can care about.

so if i burn a thousand candlelight
to paint us a starry starry night--
won't you be too tired to make that flight back
just to breathe with me the same air?
just to see me cry at the sight of your smile
cos i miss you setting me on fire
by the spark in your kiss.
let me beg you of this;

relieve me of my fear and doubt.
be as close to me to breathe in
what you breathe out...

and all the stars, and moon and skies
would be as silent as a candlelight
when you're at my side.


the universe would've been noiseless as nonexistent.
if only you was her, tonight...

Author's Note

the last stanza i though of, was supposed to be "if only you were here."

but when i looked at it, i was made aware of the "slip" that occurred.

it's a subconscious intention which slipped through to compromise. so i left it that way. HAHAHAHA

Reviews

[Rene Velez]

Nice write

[Dayran]

Ex-President Clinton used an expression once to the effect that ' you are the beneficiary to a knowledge you know nothing about.' It says a great deal of the unmindfulness of the person when they speak of themselves. This one's for the library.

[Jane Doe]

Aww sorri I haven't been on lately dodong but with algebra homework and softball on top of everything else IM SWAMPED D: it sucks we don't get to talk. Often I promise to writemessage() you a's long a's u write(message)back:D

I like the poem it's was deep write(message) me and tell me who you were looking back on pweeezzzz

Xoxoxoxxxxooooxxo
~your inday!:)
100/100

[Abysmal Savant]

excellent use of text. i am inspired by your skill- this is tight

[Kenneth The Poet]

Heavy.

[RienKelsoCinema]

This seems to be, to me, a very active thought the paints the manipulation through the words on which you are trying to convey to the reader. The use of making certain words really stand out to how understanding this poem really affects the outcome. My favorite types of poems that really stand out are the ones that no reason or any type of structure. It seems boring reading the same 8 lines with a 4 break in between. Good job sir.

[Becky C Strukamp]

relieve me of my fear and doubt.
be as close to me to breathe in
what you breathe out...

i loved this stanza...relieve me of my fear and doubt. ( excellent )
and ..breath in what you breath out ( brilliant)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Amazing write and love the font usage you made adds so much and the loving yearning of the loved one shines through so well indeed :)