Deaths sleep

Deaths sleep

A Poem by newyearnorma

Body feeling warm
Blood running cold

You are in fear's hands tonight and there you will stay
Poor little creature, you didn't listen to good advice
You left the comfort you knew

A good looking man with a nice smile led you away
Whispering all the words you wanted to hear
Promising to fulfill your every dream

You failed to notice the truth behind his lies
Now you are his play thing
His toy to destroy when it stops amusing him

He will leave you naked in a field
Leave you thrown away like garbage

Death will come for you, letting you sleep with for a eternity  to dream

© 2012 newyearnorma


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Intriguing write. I loved this. Nicely done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Sinister man...vulnerable child...what is it about people telling us they can make all our dreams come true and we believe it...when we really don't know what is real or what isn't...definately have enough time to ponder that one in her sleep of the dead. You wrote such a sorry tale..but true too often...you told this story very well and gave it just the right touch of life to feel the coming ending...yet he continues on long after ... I would also wonder if this isn't a reflection of a version inside ones own life story?? As it feels as though it's being revisited...and the death isn't so much the body as it is the spirit inside was left naked and raw inside the body's field...the outer shell being the garbage thrown as if it never existed...I wonder about that :) Really emotion tugging image you paint :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


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clever metaphors. An inspiring read

Posted 10 Years Ago


a very haunting and chilling poem enjoyed reading it

Posted 10 Years Ago


I like how it starts...Body feeling warm Blood running cold
the second stanza had a great accusing voice
the third stanza hints in the first line where the problem began and goes on to label all the usual traits of the predators ways
I like the way you have expressed the idea of being objectified here
that last line seems to have two words that dont feel as though they should be there....(letting you sleep WITH for A eternity) (Death will come for you, letting you sleep for a eternity to dream).
A nice warning in this poem cloaked in articulate style. Thankyou.

Posted 10 Years Ago


thats serious...............and dark..........but spot on

Posted 10 Years Ago


Haunting and chilling. excellently penned.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Nice poem.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Powerful and eerie with a sense of finality in every line. Well penned.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Ah yes, the predator strikes again. Very interesting metaphors and imagery.
I read the very authoritative sound. A warning to someone close or a reflective warning of deeds past. Thanks for the read request.

Posted 10 Years Ago



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