We All Fall Down

To me, sex is like a carnival, a playground, and Ashes, Ashes all bunched into one. Lemme explain.

 

It's like a carnival because you escape. You escape into a world that, really, just feels really damn good. You escape into a world where everyone loves you and everyone wants to hold you and everyone needs you. You escape into a world where you feel like you belong and nobody judges you.

 

It's like a playground because of all the smiling faces. It's like a playground because of how nice it feels at dark. Because you can close your eyes and breathe and it's not a big deal.

 

And it's like Ashes, Ashes because you hold hands and spin around over and over again, and for a while that all feels good. But then you stop spinning and you fall down and everybody goes home and back to their lives and you're left all alone and sometimes it hurts. It really, really hurts.

 

And then it starts all over again.

Reviews

[A LaDy NaMeD D]

Interesting perspective on sex to me its like a gift. Something a person sometimes blindly gives, and something the person it's given to takes plays with it for a while and throws it away. Or it can be a well thought out gift, that the person who recieves it cherishes and apperciates. Your perspective is also true though.

Danni J

[MarkGMelvin]

Interesting

[Initium]

To sum it all up, ashes can be the heart of life.
I like it. I am going to read the rest.

[Jules]

I really liked your comparison between sex and a carnival, ashes and a playground. The way in which you explained why you said this was good. It was easy to read and made sense. The one thing is, a lot of your sentences began the same way, which made it flow in a weird way, kind of. Good work though!