Liar.Liar. Hearts On Fire (Tanka #63)

Just got inspired

Liar Liar hearts on fire
Do you feel the burning inside?
Liar Liar hearts on fire
It is the one you told before
The one where you say you loved me

Reviews

[m3lody mae]

wow! this is amazing, Love this write

[Tazeen Ahmed]

Love this line-
"liar,liar hearts on fire"
Meaningful and powerful!

[MandaBear]

Thank you so much! I am glad to see you enjoyed my writing!

[Tazeen Ahmed]

You're very welcome!!!

[matrixmark]

Great piece about deception and lies. Had it done to me a couple of times.

Liar liar hearts on fire - beautifully sums it up.

Kudos to you.

Mark.

[MandaBear]

Thank you so much Mark. I am glad you enjoyed my writing.

[matrixmark]

Thnak you too, for a piece which I could relate to from a ime long, long ago.

Mark.

[The dark story]

Short yet strong and explicit. The iteration stresses the emotion and makes it more powerful.

[MandaBear]

Thank you for the lovely comment. Made my day =)

[Shae-Leigh Johns]

this piece is short , but it is so too the point and beautiful I love it

[MandaBear]

I am so glad to hear you loved it =)

[Jibey]

I wasn't quite sure what was going on here. I think it's saying that 'you say you loved me' when in fact it was a lie...

But I like the image and there is an intensity about the short lines and the repetition of 'liar'. 'Hearts on fire' is a great phrase...

[MandaBear]

Yeah that is what I was going for. It needs work to get the point across better I think but at the time I wrote this I felt it was good. Thank you for the review!