I love you...

I love you...

A Poem by MandaBear
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Just something I had to get off my chest. I know its kinda long but like I said I had to get it off I hope you like it :)

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I have told you over and over how I feel about you. 
I have cried my last tear over you.
You either care or you don't.
But the message is the same; I love you.
I have written down my feelings 
I have said my peace 
Yet somehow there is more to say
How can this be??
How many way are there to say I love you?
Its plain and simple my dear
Its right in front of you 
like the eyes on your face.
You are my song,
You are my play,
You are the ink in my pen,
You are the blood in my heart.
Can I make my self any clearer?
Is there anything more I can say??
I love you, I love you 
I can't see my self without you.
There I said it 
Are you even there?
Am I talking to myself??
Do you have anything to say??
Like a play without a writer,
Like a song without a melody,
Like a soul without a body, 
I am a girl without you. 
Like a rainbow without colors, 
Like a tree without leaves,
Like a cloud without rain,
I am a woman without a man.
Like a writer without words, 
Like a pen without ink,
Like a paper without lines,
I am a girl without her love.
I have told you over and over how I feel about you. 
I have cried my last tear over you.
You either care or you don't.
But the message is the same; I love you.

© 2013 MandaBear


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Great use of both anaphoras and refrains, let's say repetitions were great ! xD
Again, there's a lot of pathos stressed even more by the poetic metaphors (ah forgot to say, you've done a great job with them too). Hope he loves you back because that poem was very cool and it looks sincere ! :)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Aww, Amanda this is soo sad :( I can relate to this totally. I kept trying to tell the dude how I felt but I didn't think he cared at all. It sucks!



Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

Posted 7 Years Ago


Sad, sad, sad, a very emtional wonderful write. Thank you

Posted 7 Years Ago


beautiful- there are so many touching, passionate metaphors

Posted 7 Years Ago


This is so sad! I want to you give you a.hug! Great work!

Posted 7 Years Ago


so touching...




Posted 7 Years Ago


so much emotion encrypted in every line..


Posted 7 Years Ago


Real emotion of never died. Dances in our head and come out to make us wish for a better ending. I like the desire and the flow of emotion in the poem. Some messages are for us to hold close. True love is a gift we open rarely in along life. I like the complete poem. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 7 Years Ago


A message from your heart and soul.. I can only hope it falls onto ears that hear you:) xo

Posted 7 Years Ago



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