Delicious death

A Poem by Yasmin

This is something I wrote about a friend of mine

Let the melody of this symphony tell you a story
About a girl who held the world’s worry

Seeing her best friend wasting years of her life
Crying about it all day and all night

Tears made of gold, she drains
For the same old ride in life’s train

Fighting to prove the fakeness of her best friend’s tale
To remove the mask that hides the truth, she fails

Every time she sees her best friend in pain
Adrenaline rushes through her veins
She yells at her to get her back to her brain
But what for that best friend is insane

Believing him she was so sure
That he was Romeo and she was Juliet
Not knowing that he plays Don Juan DeMarco`s role
Giving him everything throwing away her soul

One laugh of reality killed her innocent love
As she understood everything, her power went off

She found him cheating on her with another girl
Breaking her heart, smashing that beautiful pearl

Kissing and making out in her own bed
Wishing to die before seeing the truth that he hid

And ever since that moonless night
No air, no sun, no rose nor light
Could find a way to that poor girl’s life

And what for?!! Death she requests
Pain, The new definition of love these days

And her request, God confirms
Ending her story and the story of similar girls

Her grave was filled with dark black roses
The same way her life used to be
Pure soft tears of her loyal best friend
As her body was marked with that cheater’s kisses
And his hugs that can never be erased
Her symphony ends, satisfying that pig’s needs
Who threw her years like used toilet sheets
And stabbed her in the back to use
Another Barbie for his next meal

© 2013 Yasmin

Author's Note

I think we all have had that friend who just can't stop hurting himself...

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beautiful dreamer

isn't that awful? i feel yah sister great write

Posted 11 Years Ago

RedInk524

As i read this i could feel my smile get bigger and my nods come more often. There are many lines in this that blow my mind with the creativity, things that i would never had thought of. With that, there were also many comparisons and truths stated that i cannot help but happily agree with. A very strong theme in this, and you just kept supporting and strengthening it. The energy was well balanced leaving no room for disinterest. I'll agree that there are some moments in which the flow was a little off, but that is perfectly fine. Nothing in this world could ever be perfect, plus it fits with the falls in the story.
This is a very common theme, but with your creativity you made it your own. Not to mention you made several respectful and suiting allusions, something that real writers do. This poem has many great qualities, making it part of the better (if not the best) portion of work on this site. I really enjoyed reading this. Usually when i read work i only pay attention to the first few lines before i start skimming out of boredom, but this held my full attention from beginning to end. Excellent. Favoriting this.. I hope to see more work like this from you, you may rise to be one of my favorite writers on here if you keep up the great work.

Posted 11 Years Ago

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11 Years Ago

I am speechless to your kind words. I am thrilled to read your review and to be honest my eyes were .. read more

CecilA

Yasmin,
I have read several of your poems and really enjoyed all of them. You are very talented.

Suggestions: I would rewrite while reading them aloud or record them and rewrite while listening to the playback. Also, try to show us more as opposed to telling us your stories. Puncuation would be a great help; readers need rest points.

Great poems; nicely composed. Just need a little TLC. I appereciate the opportunity to read and review your work.

Sincerely,

Cecil