Maybe I...

maybe i...

maybe i'm not the kinda guy for you...

maybe i...

maybe i'm not the "type" you'd like to do...

 maybe i...

 maybe i... i don't need to act all "cool"...

 maybe i...

 oh baby i... i don't need to play games like you do...

maybe i...

 oh maybe i... i'm not the one who is the fool...

maybe i...

 maybe i have something more than you do...

baby i...

oh baby i... i have a heart that's pure and true...

baby i...

 maybe i... maybe i'll write this one for you...

Author's Note

i did a "taylor swift" on guy.. lol

Reviews

[KeeD]

I like this so much, It reminds me of a song by Five for fighting called - Maybe I.. :D
I loved your presentation and this was so honest and sweet.. Lovely write bro.

[N!LoC]

OMG..... that was the song that INSPIRED me to write this!!!!! woweeee!!! thats such an obscure song..!!! can't believe you pin pointed it out !!! lol

[KAOlmsted]

John Ondrasik sings a song about penguins on that kid's CD Dog Train (AWESOME, by the way) Just saying ;-)

[C.C. Marx]

You might give old t-swizzle a run for her money haha the girl obviously has some emotional issues she needs to take care of before she goes throwing herself, excuse me I mean dating ;) again. Clever work

[N!LoC]

hahahaha :-p

[KAOlmsted]

*sigh* Been there... ;-)

Really great stuff, N; very emotional yet logical...tricky stuff to pull off. You did a nice job with it.

[N!LoC]

oh tq so much... i don't really want to admit this but this isn't really one of my fav pieces i've written but seeing that so many people seem to like it... i feel good about posting some of my "less fav" poems now :-)

[KAOlmsted]

We are our own worst critics and it is always beneficial to get fresh eyes on something we may not think is any good, you know? That's why I love this place. I have to admit, though, the Taylor Swift reference was lost on me, so I asked my nine year old daughter who she was...and she was all eye rolls and heavy sighs and "duh, Mom" xD She played me a song of hers on youtube and I was like, "ohhhh...okay" *laugh*

Anyway...always my pleasure, N ;-)

[N!LoC]

omg you really didnt know who taylor swift was?? ok ok.. lemme catch u up with that ... taylor swift has now become so infamous for dating every hot hunky celebrity jock in hollywood and like after 1 week or 2... she goes through a break up and she writes songs about them and has no problem whatsoever telling the world about it .. (CLASSless i think)... so thats why i mocked myself saying i pulled a "taylor swift" on a guy... (hey! at least i didn't reveal who the guy was!!! ) lol

[KAOlmsted]

I know who the guy is ;-)

:-p

[Jonathan Biswell]

awww cute

[N!LoC]

lol and another "aww" lol !!! thanks joanthan !

[Jonathan Biswell]

your welcome keep up the good work

[Winchester Saltgunner]

Awwwweee Hun I love it it's deliciously straight up

[N!LoC]

thanks! for the "awwwwweee" !

[Winchester Saltgunner]

Welcome

[Sam Gregory]

I was gonna say the use of baby seemed a little corny to me, but then I read the authors note and thought "yeah this works". Creative tbh. The only critique I have is that ur lower case I's need to be destroyed :P It's just a thing that irks me haha.

[Sam Gregory]

Oh, and I like the rhythm a lot btw

[N!LoC]

hahaha to be completely honest ... i couldn't really give a rats a*s about CAPS and whatnots... i just type and get it over with...lol

thanks for your review sam... always nice to see u on here :-)

[Sam Gregory]

hahaha no problem :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

taylor swift? interesting...

this could be a poem by a speaker who gets into relationships, then breaks up in order to write a poem.

i like how you set it up...good rhythm.

[N!LoC]

yes!!! you got the "taylor swift" (pop culture) reference lol !

[Baby Ricochet]

Cute write N!LoC. Great flow. You can sing it

[N!LoC]

meeee? siiiing???? ............... oh no no no... i wouldn't want to inflict any pain on your eardrums... :-p

[Andie]

It was very cute and sweet. :)

[N!LoC]

haha funny that u say that.. ... because thats how most guys usually describe me lol !

[Andie]

Hahaha! I'm guessing you read like a book? ^^

[N!LoC]

hmmm i guess so... but then the whole "don't judge a book by its cover" does still apply hihihi

[Frieda P]

It's got a good beat and you can dance to it ;-) ...if these are lyrics for a song, they're catchy, otherwise it's kind of choppy and reads more like singular text messages.

[N!LoC]

oh my frieda!!! thats exactly where i got my inspiration from ! it was from an obscure song from (five for fighting)... and i decided to write up my own lyrics in the structure of that song... oh oh oho oho oh... u are a pro reviewer arent ya!!! lol