Pit of Despair

From bad to worse...

In this place, so dark and deep

Makes me wish for eternal sleep

No more pain and no more loss

No more lies, but at such cost

No more faith and no more hope

No smiles as I only mope

There is no light or sunny day

Only black that fades to grey

With heavy heart and empty soul

Seeking an end becomes my goal

I am deep within this dark place

Broken heart and empty space

I was a fool to think and believe

From this suffering I would gain reprieve

But now I sit alone and wait

For the end is near, it is my fate

 

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. such fierce darkness.. have been there a time or 2 for sure.. lost my 3 grandparents and my father within 2 years.. one after another.. 3 were my biggest support system family-wise.. really hurt... your lines:

I was a fool to think and believeFrom this suffering I would gain reprieveBut now I sit alone and waitFor the end is near, it is my fate

No material thing in this world can we take with us.. memories we can hold.. hope, peace, belief, dreams, we sometimes hit road blocks.. but then we have to survive and find the true meaning behind each and every test in life. You have more strength than most.. you have ventured to do that which most will not.. your uncle sounds like he was a fantastic person who had impact on you.. if you get really sad alot of people seek therapy if they get too down.. that may not be the case.. you may just be writing a really sad moment in mourning when you wrote this... I hope you are not nearing your true end.. fate.

[Unspoken poet]

Wow, this is so awesome and ever so poetic

[Sami Khalil]

A good rhyming poem,. Thank you for sharing...:).....................

[DaniElle LaPointe]

Dear Fellow Albertan.... Thank you for sharing James! Here's a prayer that within that broken heart and empty space...creativity becomes your peace.

DaniElle

[SnailMadness]

Wow... this poem is really AMAZING i love it the rhyming was fantastic and it flowed well it just rolls right off my tounge. While i was reading i actually pictured the pit as you described it this poem is awesome good work!

[Melissa Kesead]

Wow, pretty dark but it flowed very well. Thanks for sharing!