Pit of Despair

Pit of Despair

A Poem by James Takeo Panton
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From bad to worse...

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In this place, so dark and deep
Makes me wish for eternal sleep
No more pain and no more loss
No more lies, but at such cost
No more faith and no more hope
No smiles as I only mope
There is no light or sunny day
Only black that fades to grey
With heavy heart and empty soul
Seeking an end becomes my goal
I am deep within this dark place
Broken heart and empty space
I was a fool to think and believe
From this suffering I would gain reprieve
But now I sit alone and wait
For the end is near, it is my fate
 

© 2009 James Takeo Panton


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Wow.. such fierce darkness.. have been there a time or 2 for sure.. lost my 3 grandparents and my father within 2 years.. one after another.. 3 were my biggest support system family-wise.. really hurt... your lines:

I was a fool to think and believeFrom this suffering I would gain reprieveBut now I sit alone and waitFor the end is near, it is my fate

No material thing in this world can we take with us.. memories we can hold.. hope, peace, belief, dreams, we sometimes hit road blocks.. but then we have to survive and find the true meaning behind each and every test in life. You have more strength than most.. you have ventured to do that which most will not.. your uncle sounds like he was a fantastic person who had impact on you.. if you get really sad alot of people seek therapy if they get too down.. that may not be the case.. you may just be writing a really sad moment in mourning when you wrote this... I hope you are not nearing your true end.. fate.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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A good rhyming poem,. Thank you for sharing...:).....................

Posted 5 Years Ago


Dear Fellow Albertan.... Thank you for sharing James! Here's a prayer that within that broken heart and empty space...creativity becomes your peace.

DaniElle

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow.. such fierce darkness.. have been there a time or 2 for sure.. lost my 3 grandparents and my father within 2 years.. one after another.. 3 were my biggest support system family-wise.. really hurt... your lines:

I was a fool to think and believeFrom this suffering I would gain reprieveBut now I sit alone and waitFor the end is near, it is my fate

No material thing in this world can we take with us.. memories we can hold.. hope, peace, belief, dreams, we sometimes hit road blocks.. but then we have to survive and find the true meaning behind each and every test in life. You have more strength than most.. you have ventured to do that which most will not.. your uncle sounds like he was a fantastic person who had impact on you.. if you get really sad alot of people seek therapy if they get too down.. that may not be the case.. you may just be writing a really sad moment in mourning when you wrote this... I hope you are not nearing your true end.. fate.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow... this poem is really AMAZING i love it the rhyming was fantastic and it flowed well it just rolls right off my tounge. While i was reading i actually pictured the pit as you described it this poem is awesome good work!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Wow, pretty dark but it flowed very well. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on April 14, 2009

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James Takeo Panton
James Takeo Panton

Edmonton, Alberta, Canada, Canada



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I am a 38-year old amateur and have only recently started writing some stuff. I began putting down these words around November, 2007, and discovered that I enjoyed doing this, and now I am seeing w.. more..

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