Boy Wet

Observation on youth, joy of living

Glistening wet

Tan skin, golden hairs

Shimmer in the sun

Dive

An effortless swan

Arcing through air

Piercing the water

And rising like an otter

With a laugh and a yell

Boy and nature are one

Reviews

[Jenna]

Yeah the chick below me is right. But You did a good job. Its simple which I like. People dont really like it when things are just tooo long and start getting complicated and not making sense. The shorter things are the things that make the most impact and leave you thinking. You really showed how the boy and " nature " got on really well. The image that I had when reading this was the classic boy swinging on the rope or the tire swing to plunge into the lake. It gives a sense of summer time of years ago of your childhood.

[Nikky with broken wings..]

Really really good. Simply written, but illustrated perfectly. It's actually so true. Very elegant, even in free form.
Good Job. :)

[just is]

I thnk this is wonderful
I like how it all becomes one
in just afew words,
well put.

[Amandalyn]

I think you could have added on to this. For some reason when I finish reading it I want more, I feel like it has potential to express more about how boy and nature are one.