Burden'd Soul

Cursed with love i'm and still suffering.
With what i'm sent here,
What is that i'm gonna do?
He said yesterday,"You are happy!",
How I know from within,i'm beaten black and blue.

Weeping is nomore a new activity,
Silence has now lost its identity.
I've now started breaking the habit.
The habit that possessed my role.
Though i'm living but i'm dying with a burden'd soul.

Reviews

[Mehul Rwat]

The idea was nice, but the poem was a bit crude. See every poem needs refinement. You write good. Just focus on your language and how you express your ideas. Your thinking shows that you are capable in every way. Practice and improve your selection of words. This is advice so please don't feel offended. Keep it up!

[CHRIS ANDES]

though consist of few lines
I've discovered a lot of emotions here
=]
keep it up

[∂αʌ<..]

"Weeping is nomore a new activity,
Silence has now lost its identity."

amazing poem really..each verse has its own story within..i think they reflect the deep pain you wanted to portray!

magnificent!

[An owl on the moon]

There is an overwhelming sense of anxiety, of suffering within and without... The song weeps over the soul and fills the day with darkness.

[LinBin]

I understand what you are trying to say here and I commend you on your open ans honest approach, you write with a good heart x

[SheDreamsInTheSun]

I thought it was great, I loved the last line "Though i'm living but i'm dying with a burden'd soul" it blew me away.

[nishalization]

Guys thank you very much for your support... As this is my first work of poetry,i would love to hear from you all.though good or bad...
I'm waiting for your comments!your comments!