Thirteen Signs

Thirteen signs to indicate that the protagonist is falling out of love with another. The fault mainly lies with the protagonist.

 

Fire is love and water, sorrow

At this moment, water has put out the fire

This love is gone and will never return

No more lingering affection, no remaining desire

 

Trapped in a cycle of unhappiness

I’ve given up, I am going to leave

So much sorrow, so much wretchedness

I’m exhausted, I no longer want to give

 

I started the game with passion aplenty

Now I leave the same with apathy and disinterest

The comforting warmth we once felt is now painfully icy

The promise of forever is now nothing more than a curse

 

I don’t feel like sharing anything

You don’t need to tell me your feelings

There is no attachment anymore

Irreversible, it’s never going the same as before

 

Calling you feels like an onerous obligation

Talking to you seems like another pointless distraction

In this episode of life, we are left with more unanswered questions 

Acting as strangers, our love screams nothing more than fiction

 

Our future does not spell the word hope

I can’t picture our happy-ever-after

But it does tell me it’s time to cut the rope

And I can only picture us away from each other

 

Once beautifully intertwined

We have gone back to being two parallel lines

The drink of love now tastes resentful and bitter

And I no longer drink it for I refuse to suffer

I’ve burned this commitment completely

I’ve broken this mutual trust

Destroyed our innocent vow in its entirety

I want the next rendezvous to be our last

 

My heart is nowhere near

My mind is once again clouded by fear

My body crumbles once again

For I have loved in vain.

And I have put us both in pain.

 

I’ve stitched the veil of caution, now it envelops my heart

I’ve assembled my bricks, built my walls up again

Tirelessly, desperately dying for a new start

For a new start to come, this must surely end

 

I’m saying goodbye before it’s too late

I’m making it clear that I no longer wish to wait

We’re such in a tragic, ruined state

Disconnected, separation is now our fate

 

I’m convinced that without you, I’ll be just fine

If I could do all I can to rewind,

I’d tell myself there is no me and you in this life

 If anything, you were only my once upon a time

 

I have longed

Longed, for the moment to be free

And I am only free

Free, the moment you’re not with me

Author's Note

For this piece, I researched thoroughly on the signs of falling out of love and then crafted my poetry around the signs. Each stanza takes you through the signs – With the first portraying the loss of sexual intimacy/attraction to the final stanza portraying the feeling of liberation when the protagonist finally leaves. This piece was a painful one for me, but I hope you enjoy this piece.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You had me from the beginning.
"Fire is love and water, sorrow
At this moment, water has put out the fire
This love is gone and will never return
No more lingering affection, no remaining desire"
I love the lines above. I enjoyed the journey leading to the amazing ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Nisha M.]

As always, I thank you for your kind words, my friend!

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure Nisha and you are welcome.

[barleygirl]

This is one of the best “break-up” poems I’ve ever read. There’s so much true-to-life detail that’s described artfully instead of being a dreary blame-rant. Your observations are relatable & stated in original, imaginative ways. I like your author’s note, as a way to show other writers how you conceived this poem. But I did not get the idea of 13 distinct issues from reading your poem. I don’t like to write an author’s note that causes a reader to have a certain expectation. I like to let each reader take whatever he/she finds in my poem, without me trying to influence. To me, your poem is simply a series of statements that grow increasingly more certain & decisive, as if the narrator starts out trying to talk him/herself into this split, but then as the poem goes on, becoming more convinced, the split feels more righteous & justified. Your details are well-explained & interesting (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Nisha M.]

Thank you so much for taking the time to write this detailed review!!! I appreciate it :)

[Casey Bovat]

This is so beautifully written it's almost like a song. I love the rhymes and when I read it I had so many different feelings, I loved this poem its beautiful.

[Nisha M.]

Thank you so much for loving this poem! It truly made my day. :)

[H L Rose]

First of all, I love that you put research into this. It shows how much you invested in it.

Second, it is too heart wrenching to analyze and I am afraid if I read it that deeply, I’ll get stuck in a very sad state. Sooooo I’m gunna avoid that, but it is really emotional, and I thinks it's extremely well written.

I think you’ve done a very good job at getting your point across!

[Nisha M.]

Thank you so much, Hannah! I'm so thankful that you always take the time to read my work. It is really so kind of you and I appreciate that so much! xx

[H L Rose]

Of course! It is such a pleasure!

[Ms Paragon]

You can follow the progression of emotions leading to the final separation and share the "process" of falling out of love.Sad yet powerful.Welll done!

[Nisha M.]

Thank you so much for reading this and stopping by to leave a review! I appreciate this so much!

[Ms Paragon]

You're welcome!

[¿]

These lines are heart wrenching.....really amazing read!!
Thanks for sharing Nisha😊

[Nisha M.]

Ahhh thank you so much for this kind review!! I appreciate this!!!

[송지ፏ..]

I liked this very much. You can feel the emotion you write!

[Nisha M.]

Thank you so much for liking it, Ji-Suk! I'm glad to hear this! :)

[Vishnu]

I am surprised about the length! Fantastic!

[Nisha M.]

Thank you so much for this, Vishnu!!

[Lola_Bee]

I read this with deep sorrow. I am inlove but i love only with fear always. Its a beautifully deep piece and loved reading every word.

[Nisha M.]

Thank you so much for reading and liking this piece, I truly appreciate it!

[sette]

this is something else a totally unique piece of writing my friend

[Nisha M.]

Thanks for reading and stopping by to leave a review my friend!

[sette]

no problem my friend