An Island of Snow (Over, Around , Under and Through

An abstract song I wrote in my spare time

An Island of Snow (Over, Around, Under and Through)

Did you ever hear the Jaybird’s call

 As it leans against the wall?

It watches the children with its diamond eyes

And telling them filthy lies

 Waking up at midnight

Head drenched in sweat

There is something you don’t get

Dreaming of an island of snow

That’s where all the bad ideas go

To fade away alone

Long ago and far away

 When the rats came out to play

Deep beneath the curve of space

A phantom’s cruel, grinning face

Staring into the light

Golden bats flying low

Where the gray winds flow

To the place where bad ideas go                                   

Reviews

[Drako]

an interesting concept, giving a place for bad ideas to go. an interesting read

[Cassiopia Summers]

I like this piece. It seems that everyone does have a place they store their bad ideas. (: That's what this piece reminded me of. Fantastic write.

[Detective Watts]

Thats good. Getting published good

[profile deleted]

its different... great write

[LeCatchy]

I really like the imagery you've used in this.

The only thing that bugs me is the end of the first verse. The second last line seems a bit too long, and the last line seems a bit too short, so they mess up the flow a little bit.