Superstition (A drabble)

a funny thought occured to me today, and I decided to play with the idea to make a story in exactly 100 words. hope you enjoy!

 

She pulled up to the intersection, looking both ways.

“Oh, man…” she muttered. A black cat was about to cross in front of her.

That’s all I need, the way my luck has been lately, she thought.

Her boyfriend had left her on Valentine’s Day, for some ditzy Barbie-looking blonde. Her mortgage was a month behind after her car broke down unexpectedly. She certainly didn’t need any more bad luck.

She wasn’t normally superstitious, but still kept an eye on the feline as she turned the opposite direction, trying to avoid him…seconds before hitting the oncoming car.

Reviews

[Jen Yarrington]

I expected the ending to be a nice little lesson on how superstitions are silly and unfounded. Definitely a surprise outcome, which leads me to ponder - was the black cat really bad luck, or was the point that she really wasn't paying attention to the more important things in life?

[Raven Madd]

She should have went up and pet the cat, then she wouldn't have gotten hit lol.
You describe atmosphere very well, and your ability to set a scene is phenomenal. A short little blurb detailing a dark and gruesome scene, and for what reason? Because you can, that's why.

[Celtic Cat]

Righteous!!! You made me happy with that! Yes... I'm warped, and not having a great day.
Love this piece.... you should "play" more often!!! Brava!!

[Cassidy Mask]

Awesome. I love the bit at the end
'�seconds before hitting the oncoming car.'
Nice.

Cassidy