Convict

i think it would sound more like Rap lyric

Convict

Fire in my heart burns out

Try to keep focus but I pass out

Times pass by for things to heat up

Spend all my energy to give my best shot

I’m trying very hard just to stand up

Can’t accept the fact of being locked up

The longer I’m inside, my spaces got shrunk up

In jail, writing is the only thing that I crave of

 

This is nightmare, so I scream and somebody says shut up

Had done bad things, so terrible that I couldn’t even speak of

Regards about theses and think that I should have backed off

Now these deeds will hunt me and that’s what I’m afraid of

This certainly isn’t the life that I always dream of

I’m lost and felt that I have already given up

Destiny is something I have no control of

 

Hope my angles from above would speak out

That I’ll find comfort and would be taken care of

Put my trust in faith and I glance up

Guard from above says ‘pissed off’

Wish that reincarnation is the only thing I know of

Nyi

( 18.5.2010 )

 

Author's Note

Kindly please be kind to me..this is one of the very first poems that i wrote..well..it might not even look like a poem..but i'm willing to improve and i would appreciate very much for the comments

Reviews

[Dwayne]

Nyi, please feel free to write however you wish! This isn't a college classroom and most of us are not college instructors. This website is for writers to freely express them selves. We all support your doing just that. Each poem is a thing of its own, sort of like children that you don't have to raise, but you can if you want to. That is go back and change a poem to improve it, if you want to. You can also change your writing to make its meaning different if you want to, it's yours. You can also go on to write other poems. Whatever you do, keep writing and expressing yourself.

[J.Black]

It kinda seems like a rap song- not that's is bad or anything! I just see it as lyrics! I like how you based it around a jail cell, anything gruesome or impolite always gets me. Something that's looked upon as "bad" or "negative" ... but at the end, asking for reincarnation was just a perfect way to end it off, infact, you're such a great writer that sometimes I don't know why you don't give yourself the credit that you deserve! This had wonderful imagery and it felt like I was that person inside of that jail cell, thinking over all the stuff that went wrong, what brought me this place of hate, and being inside those bars having the guard telling me off for the terrible s**t I pulled off. I like this! Well done.