Try to Imagine Nothing

Try to Imagine Nothing

A Poem by Gaige

Chilled, chided like a child's lover
Caught between fantasy and insurrection
Monster of man yet to become
Power his weakness, leave him so
Fallen to depths only God can know

Soul relinquished to a beggar's fate
Stolen harbinger, caught in the devil's ways
Desperate to become an embodiment of hate
Fragile paradox, a pure man now a sinner's slave
Make your amends, for the dead know their place

Deeds of doubters used to claim paradise
Violent purging, a means to an unreachable end
Complete in silence, all halos inevitably come down
More than just a criminal, a victim of fate's tragic trend

Callow hearted in awaiting a day to die
Fallen lovers unseeing, unburned, unsung
Man's lonely, last ashes lost in a gust of wind
Crosses we bear to which our nooses are hung
Last hymn meant to chastise with words daunting and cruel
It was just a joke my friend, you simply played the fool

© 2011 Gaige


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fantastic flow! this is a little darker than the others I've read from you but no less amazing. Another great one! Bravo, my friend!
MKLINE

Posted 9 Years Ago


Wow. Just...wow. Bravo.

Posted 9 Years Ago


harsh! and wow strong ! loved it and i love the flow and the feeling you put in it!

Posted 9 Years Ago


dayum great mix of words and power. deserves the win!

Posted 9 Years Ago


That ,to be completely honest, is what I was going for. The theme is the cold emptiness that comes from being chastised and not being able to make amends for whatever mistake you have made. I was thinking of Lucifer when I wrote this, and how he was punished for what started as human curiosity and rebelling against established rule. It got me thinking as to what he would have felt if he were human. ( Just a side note, I'm agnostic)

Posted 9 Years Ago


There’s a strange emptiness to this piece that I can’t put my finger on. The diction is there, the form is there, the message is there…but something is missing. No matter how many times I read it, the whole thing comes off as cold and distant. Maybe it’s the tone, I’m not sure.

Regards,

E


Posted 9 Years Ago



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Tags: God, anger, hate, fear, religion, Satan, devil, fate, man

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Gaige
Gaige

Folsom, CA



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